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School Locker Check Persuasive Essay


Deathnot 1 / -  
Jan 29, 2008   #1
Locker Checks

Why shouldn't schools do locker checks? Why do many students oppose locker checks? Random locker checks are not done to torment and/or invade the privacy of the students, but for many other important reasons which include school security. These checks are required because malicious students bring drugs and weapons to school and store them in the lockers. Random locker checks should be made obligatory and done frequently to assure the wellbeing of the students.

In the first place, locker checks help increase the safety in schools. Safety is a problem in every environment and especially school. Drugs, alcohol, and firearms in lockers make a harmless place like school quite dangerous. School was known to be a secure environment for children where they could learn and have a have a fun time with friends. In the past 10 years that has all changed. The number of school shootings has increased significantly. Last year on April 16th the most deadly school shooting in U.S. history occurred. In this brutal massacre at Virginia Tech, 32 students were murdered and several more were wounded. To combat this growing epidemic, schools carry out repeated locker checks.

In the second place, locker checks keep students healthy. Locker checks help students stay both physically and mentally healthy because it discourages students from bringing fire arms and especially drugs. As everyone knows, drugs induce immense physical damage and when it is overdosed drugs can lead to death. As a result, drugs completely destroy a student's life. To prevent problems like this locker checks are required. Without the use of drugs, school security will increase dramatically. If the school is safe, students will no be frightened or strained.

Lastly, more students will comply with the school policies because there are frequent locker checks and other students are getting caught and punished for it. The students who are yet to be caught will learn from the mistakes of other students and will stop. To increase the effect of locker checks, they should be done with security guards and dogs. Security guards at school increase security and security dogs help find drugs with their noses. School is a place to learn, not a place to bring malicious substances, electronics and etc. So, only learning material should be brought to school. With the continued discouraging of bringing drugs and weapons, a completely secure school will become an accomplishable goal.

Locker checks should be made mandatory and done frequently because they assure security in schools, makes students healthy, and will make students obey school policies in the future. Students should appreciate locker checks and other measures taken by the school to protect the school and the students. Privacy is a small price to pay for security against drugs and weapons. Like it or not, privacy will be invaded not only at school, so students have to accept it.

Note: I am a Freshmen in highs school so only constructive crticisim.

EF_Team2 1 / 1,709  
Jan 30, 2008   #2
Greetings!

For a high school freshman, you are a very good writer! I have just a few editing suggestions for you:

As everyone knows, drugs induce immense physical damage and, when overdosed, drugs can lead to death.

If the school is safe, students will not be frightened or stressed.

School is a place to learn, not a place to bring malicious substances, electronics and etc. - Saying "and etc." is actually redundant, because "et" means "and." It's best to avoid using etc. in formal writing anyway, as it can be seen as lacking specificity. It might be best just to end this sentence with "malicious substances." You weren't talking about electronics, so it's a bit off point.

Locker checks should be made mandatory and done frequently because they assure security in schools, make students healthy,

Good job!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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