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TOEFL: Schools should allot some hours a day to the physical exercises for their students.


djanat 19 / 29  
Mar 12, 2010   #1
Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Exercise mind and body



Today, the role of the schools has much more expanded than ever. Schools do not only give courses or degrees to students who most of time they are inside these institutions. But schools have a huge effect on students' life and health. One of the most things that schools should obviously include in their daily programs is the physical exercises.

Like all people, students need to do some physical exercises at least once a day. The continuous hours of study can lead the student to get depression. So it is well recommended for the schools to take their students far from being depressed. There are all of students to attempt to suicide because they had a lot of pressure in their schools. Physical exercises can release this depression from students.

On the other hand, physical exercises can bring some pleasure and fun for the students who have some obsession about schools. They think that schools are establishing only for studying hard and being serious. Ultimately, they flee from the school. Physical exercises help schools to avoid these behaviors by including some pleasure in their programs.

Another reason for why physical exercises should be a required part of every school day, is because physical exercises have a good impact on students' health. Students can learn good habits by practicing some physical exercises at schools. They can avoid by these habits getting a lot of health problems such as obesity a heart diseases.

Some people think that students should spend the whole school day in academic study because physical exercises do not help them to success in their education. I wonder if the success in education is more important that the students feelings and health. The students do not need only to get agood scores in their education, but they need to be healthy and comfortable.

The schools should allot some hours a day to the physical exercises for their students. Being indifferent with the health and the feeling of the students do not serve any one, neither the students nor the schools.

PLEASE I NEED YOUR CORRECTION
vikasp 2 / 8  
Mar 12, 2010   #2
i think that you have little problem with grammar i'm pointing out some of your mistakes hope it will help you
"who most of time they are inside" most of the time who are inside
"One of the most things" one of the most important thing
"daily programs" daily program
"to get depression" to get into depression
"There are all of students to attempt to suicide" many students try to commit suicide
"they had" they have


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