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TOEFL "schools should give equal amount of money to sports activities and libraries"

milk355 2 / 3  
Jan 7, 2012   #1
"Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities
should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities
as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and
examples to support your opinion."

I agree with the statement.
First, the students' athletic lives are just as important as their academic lives. From my experiences, spending a little time each day to exercise actually improves my performance in studying. Sitting in front of the desk all day may seem to increase the amount students learn, but this is not so. After staying in the chair for over a certain amount of time, students start to feel worn out, and eventually lose concentration. Although students spend more time, the amount of workload they can do does not increase proportionally, because their efficiency will go down. Therefore, it is important to incorporate physical exercises into the daily schedule of students. However, with lack of money, the school will not be able to provide sufficient environment for students to do so. Gyms may be too small, so that only a handful of people have access to it. Equipments may be too old to use anymore. There may be no sports advisor to guide the students to exercise properly.

Second, the students' athletic engagement can create additional income for the university. The most easy-to-understand example is football. If a university has a strong football team, they can have the fans buy tickets and merchandise. With the increased budget, the university can put more money into athletic activities and also into academic activities.

And third, it will be unfair for the students who look forward to a sports-related career path. If a university did not put sufficient consideration into sporting activitie, these students will not be able to purse their dreams. As mentioned in the first paragraph, they will not have an environment that can train them as athletic trainers or an athlete. If the school spent more money on academic issues and less on athletic, students whose future careers are academic may be able to benefit from it, but it will have a serious impact on those who are not. I don't think any universities should discriminate, even if unintentionally, different career choices.

While this is not to say that schools should dismiss improving their libraries entirely, I think to put an equal amount of economic effort into sports activities and libraries is a fair thing to do.


What is the normal length of an essay? Is this too short?
Also, what's a good way to write an effective introduction & conclusion?
And I also would like feedback on the entire essay (or if that's too much, a single paragraph review would be just as great).

Thanks :)
hedieh 2 / 3  
Jan 8, 2012   #2
As far as I know you have to write a para about introduction! Actually use 5 para for writing essay.

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