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'Schools are nestles of education' - Essay on Violence in schools.


Chidem 4 / 18  
Apr 8, 2009   #1
Schools are nestles of education and education is teaching students the wrong and the right, revealing them the path of an easier, happier and conscious life. These sentences do not describe how schools are but indeed how schools should be. Unfortunately, today there are many crucial and prevalent problems in schools; one of the most terrifying of these is: violence. The inhabitants of schools i.e. students who ought to be ignorant and unconscious about hurting others, prevalently use violence this can be attributed to mass media and family disorders, If ugly things occur in most beautiful places then, something is wrong.

Human beings are another kind of animals unless they have rules, ethics and limits. Whatever the intention is, human health both mentally and physically must be taken into consideration. Media, for instance, tries to get people's attention with anything possible. They ignore norms, realities and most importantly ethics to make money. To illustrate the point, let's imagine a house with a wide beautiful garden in front of it, which contains miscellaneous and colorful flowers. The inhabitants of this house will not even recognize this garden when they go work or come back to home. To make that ordinary garden very attractive to inhabitants, there should be something interesting, extraordinary and strange so that people; not only inhabitants but also everybody will pay attention. For instance, a man who is being beaten by his wife. this is what media does and this is where the danger begins. Humans get used to everything gradually hence many people now enjoy violence on TV; people hitting, killing and hurting each other and others who watch have fun even pay for to see a human is injured. Furthermore, one day these people can hurt or kill other people or even ignore when someone is killed.

Another significant reason is, individual's family life. Disorders in family life may lead students also behave inappropriately in the society. The students who lack of expressing their feelings or in other words who are incurable usually prefer or assume violence as a solution. This stems from wrong or lacking family education. For instance, in case that a father always hits or hurts another member of the family when he is angry, it is very likely for the son or daughter of that father to act in the same way.We start our lives in our mothers' wombs then we continue on their lamps and we acquire our first and the most important experiences, which affect our whole live with our families these experiences also form our personality therefore families should protect their children from violence.

To conclude, two of the main factors of violence in schools are, distorted family life and careless also materialist minded media. This disturbing situation in a place where ought to be the most pleasant place in the world also prevents quality education, which in the future will give students a quality life. Hurting a living being is something that all humans should be ignorant about.

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kirin 4 / 7  
Apr 8, 2009   #2
Chidem, you write quite well and i have learn a lot from you essay. but i have a sentence from your eassay that i cannot really follow.

To make that ordinary garden very attractive to inhabitants, there should be something interesting, extraordinary and strange so that people; not only inhabitants but also everybody will pay attention.

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i think you discussed quiet well about two of the main factors of violence in your essay, but i think you had better refer to the school more .

it is my personnal opinion above as a reader. :)
OP Chidem 4 / 18  
Apr 8, 2009   #3
:) thank you. Your ideas are all important to me :)

Yes, I think you are right :P but that's what appeared on my mind at that moment... I should work more :)

and you made my day briliant :) by saying that you learn from my essays :) :) :)

thank u :) I appreciate that :)
kirin 4 / 7  
Apr 8, 2009   #4
:) ur welcomed. ur essay does give some inspiration..
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Apr 8, 2009   #5
Schools are nestles of education, and education is intended to teach students how to discern the wrong from the right -- and to reveal to them the path of an easier, happier and more conscious life.

The inhabitants of schools (i.e. students who ought to be ignorant and unconscious about hurting others) prevalently use violence, this can be attributed to mass media and family disorders. If ugly things occur in most beautiful places then, something is wrong.---For this part, what do you mean when you say "students ought to be ignorant and unconscious"?

Human beings no different from any other kinds of animals unless...

This is what media does, and this...

...behave inappropriately in the society. The students who lack the ability to express their feelings, or, in other words, who are incurable usually prefer or assume violence as a solution.

We start our lives in our mothers' wombs, and then we continue on...

To conclude, two of the main factors of violence in schools are: distorted...

When you write, Hurting a living being is something that all humans should be ignorant about it make me think you misunderstand the definition of "ignorant". Someone who i ignorant IGNORES knowledge, so he or she acts foolishly. "Ignorance" is something to avoid.

Good luck!!
OP Chidem 4 / 18  
Apr 9, 2009   #6
I mean, students mustn't know what is hurting others ... Not that teachers hide it from them but as an instinct. I tried to use ignorance in this way.. Not possible?

Thank you...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Apr 9, 2009   #7
Hurting a living being is something that all humans should be ignorant about.

It sounds like you are saying people should be ignorant.

I think you should say that these are things human beings should NOT be ignorant about. I hope I am not misunderstanding you...

Can you clarify what you want it to mean?
silverystars 14 / 105  
Apr 9, 2009   #8
I mean, students mustn't know what is hurting others ... Not that teachers hide it from them but as an instinct. I tried to use ignorance in this way.. Not possible?

Thank you...

Perhaps instead of ignorance, you mean innocence? In other words, instead of students being uneducated or lacking knowledge, they should pursue good ethics or moral values, which might imply lacking knowledge of evil, to a degree? When I am unsure of a word that I need to describe something, I will try to think of a simple word that is close to what I need and use a thesaurus to branch out into other words. It could help you in this case because ignorance is probably not what you're talking about. I hope this helps.

silverystars
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Apr 9, 2009   #9
You may want to consider adding more to your essay in order to more clearly connect your points back to the idea that violence is a problem in schools. The notion that a violent media desensitizes us to violence is an old one, but if it is true, it must surely affect all of us, as a society, not just students. So, schools should not be any more violent than society at large, if the media is to blame. But violent crime rates have been generally declining in North America (not counting Mexico). Have rates of school violence also been going down? But then, violence in schools wouldn't be the problem you claim it is. And if rates have been constant or increasing, then some other culprit other than the media must be to blame. Or is there a reason why the effects of media might be more pronounced among the student population than among the general population? Likewise, you are quite right when you say that most abusers learn their abusive behavior at home. So, a boy who watches his father beating his mother may well grow up to be an abusive husband himself. However, what does that have to do with violence in schools?

Part of the problem is that your essay seems to lack research. You present no statistics on school violence, media portrayals of violence, bullies with abusive backgrounds, etc. As a result, a lot of what you say seems to be little more than baseless assertions. If you want to strengthen your essay, read up on the topic you are writing on, then add citations from formal studies to back up your claims.
OP Chidem 4 / 18  
Apr 9, 2009   #10
Thank you, EF_Kevin, I understand what you say. I have used it like in my language but apparently it doesn't work in English :)

What I meant was, we(especially students) shouldn't be professional about using violence but should have no idea about it. (did I make it clear?)

I mean instead of using violence to each other, they should do something different because they don't know what is it...( because they are ignorant --- not generally, *merely* about violence). Like babies, for example, they don't know how to hurt others.

But now I see the point. :)

silverystars :) thank you too, but I couldn't find what I was searching. I think I should change the whole sentence and idea :)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Apr 10, 2009   #11
What I meant was, we(especially students) shouldn't be professional about using violence but should have no idea about it.

That is a very eloquent explanation! Really, this thought is difficult to explain. "Ignorance" has NEGATIVE CONNOTATIONS in English. You mean to say that children should be "naive"...

I am impressed with your intellect. I'm glad we caught that problem. Good luck with this!! :)
teelyons 2 / 8  
Apr 13, 2009   #12
Chidem,
Very interesting. I like the way you connected your idea on how children learn violence from their familes. It only stress the point that children will do what they see and not neccessily what they are told. Good work
OP Chidem 4 / 18  
Apr 24, 2009   #13
Thank you very much for trying to understand me and what I try to say. Your help really is so precious!

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