This is actually a prompt from the SAT, but is also the topic for my today's writing assignment. I know the essay is short, about 260 words or so. I had problems when writing this topic. It was like that I kept saying moral education is important because it teaches children to be responsible, and - I think - will help to reduce environmental pollution because much of the pollution is contributed by people who don't care about environment, hence, other people living in the world. (I didn't write down this because I'm sure if it's a good point.) I need examples and ideas which I'm lack of. Do you have ideas or examples, or ways to find them?
Thanks for any idea, advice, review and correction! :)
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.
Most of our schools are not facing up to their responsibilities. We must begin to ask ourselves whether educators should help students address the critical moral choices and social issues of our time. Schools have responsibilities beyond training people for jobs and getting students into college.
Adapted from Svi Shapiro
Should schools help students understand moral choices and social issues?
Should schools offer classes that teach students moral values and ethical issues? Of course. Moral education is important as much as academic education is.
Students are part of the society. They are not isolated individuals who only take classes and tests in schools. They interact with other people of society. And the act of interaction would bring out social issues which they have to make choices based on their moral values. Therefore, moral education which can help students to make the right choice is crucial.
If someone pays you for accusing nine black men of the gang rape, even though the black men have never even touched you, would you lie or would you reject the offer? Your choice is made depended on your moral values - do you value integrity, justice and non-racial discrimination very high and much higher than money? If you do not, then you would probably choose to lie, which is the choice that two women in 1930s had made - they lied and the black men were put into jail. (Scottsboro Case)
Therefore, moral education is very important and crucial because it helps children to acquire moral virtues: honesty, responsibility, integrity, respect for others. And it teaches students to recognize the importance of ethics, giving and self-control which is important for every living person that one can't do whatever one wants to do. We are living in society and we are members of our community. So when we want to do something, we need to think of the result and the effect that would make upon other people.
If someone pays you to accuse nine black men of...
Okay, and if you use "pays" you should also use "will" instead of "would."
the gang rape, even though the black men have never even touched you,
would you lie or would you reject the offer?
Do you see what I mean? You could also do this: If someone paid you to accuse... would you...
is would depend on your moral...
values - do you value integrity, justice and non-racial discrimination very high and much higher than money? --Yes, and it is also important to consider whether you have enough compassion to abstain from ruining the lives of those men.
Use "a"------> We are living in a society, and we are members...
Try to write your essay as an essay. Think it would be published on a paper or something like that. your essay have a structure like an interview.
Do not give an example which need a research, like "Scottsboro Case", otherwise it can confuse the reader.
If you are looking for some example of the importance of the moral, as you toled at the begining of your thread there are some:
"the human society is based on moral values and ethics and there are some historic example such as Rome Empire which lost its existence because the lack of moral"
"Our family integration is based on morals..."
"Those who respect moral values live better"
Do not start a sentence with "AND".
Is your last paragraph your conclusion?
Thank you, Kevin! Parallelism is important, but I didn't notice.
Thank you, Aria! Your illustrations are good and your advice is really helpful. Yes, that is my conclusion. I know the essay may not be convincing. I had problems on developing this topic. Need to do more research on it.
Thank Kevin and Aria for your valuable feedback :)