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Schools, parents, and students would benefit with the requirements of wearing uniforms


bivi1222 2 / 2 1  
Oct 30, 2014   #1
Can you please correct my new essay
In your opinion, should public schools require students to wear uniforms? Disagree or agree


I strongly agree that public school should require students to wear uniforms. Uniforms can give school a better environment and class. It also, helps parents with their budget and time. As for students uniforms help them to fit in at school without fashion controversial or statues.

Frist of all schools would benefit if students are require to wear uniforms. School's environment would be calmer. Principles and staffs would worry less about student's dress code. Uniform will be simple and evenly for everybody. If students would wear uniforms it would minimize bullying because they will wear the same cloths. For example, students with less money that is not able to buy fancy clothes at times that would create bullying among themselves.

Secondly, students wearing uniforms would benefits parent because they would spend less money buying regular cloths than uniforms. Their save can be used to buy others educational supplies. When it comes to getting ready in the morning parents would struggle less with their kids because they would get ready on their own. Kids will not argue with their parents when it comes to the new trends in fashion. My niece is always arguing with my sister regarding cloths because she argues that her mom is too old she doesn't know about fashion and what is in today. They expend some much time arguing the in many occasions they left home late and arrive to school late. If her school requires uniforms my sister would not have to argue with my niece and her cloths and they would be on time for school.

Thirdly, when it comes to students they would benefit the most having to wear uniforms. Students will be more responsible, independent, and helpful. They would help their parents in the morning by getting ready on their own. Students would have less pressure when it comes to fashion and to fit in at school. They would worry less of what they wear and put their thought and energy in something for beneficial for them. For example, helped friends that are struggle with homework, study more for a test, or participate more in school events. Uniforms give students a sense of belonging and unity to their school. They will feel that they are part of a family and would wear uniform with pride.

In conclusion, schools, parents, and students would benefit with the requirements of wearing uniforms would make their life easier because when it comes to education teachers have more time to teach their curriculum instead of worry about students dress code and the distruction that comes a long with.
Remansou 8 / 23 9  
Oct 31, 2014   #2
Uniforms give students a sense of belonging and unity to their school

Belongingness

Great ideas! I just think that your introduction is too straightforward. It might be better to start with some generalization than your exact side of view.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Oct 31, 2014   #3
Biviana, there are a number of grammatical problems that weaken your almost perfectly argued essay. I hope I can help you learn more about grammar usage by correcting your essay below. Please compare what you wrote to my suggested mode of writing:

I strongly agree that public school should require students to wear uniforms. Uniforms can give school a better environment and class. It also, helps parents with their budget and time. As for students uniforms help them to fit in at school without fashion controversial or statues.

- ... Uniforms give schools a better learning environment. It also allows parents to better budget the school expense of their children and saves the parents time when it comes to washing clothes. As for students, uniforms allow them to come to school without having to worry about fitting in fashion wise.

Frist of all schools would benefit if students are require to wear uniforms. School's environment would be calmer. Principles and staffs would worry less about student's dress code. Uniform will be simple and evenly for everybody. If students would wear uniforms it would minimize bullying because they will wear the same cloths. For example, students with less money that is not able to buy fancy clothes at times that would create bullying among themselves.

- Schools will also benefit from the uniform policy because the learning environment will be calmer due to the equality that uniforms provide to students. Principals and school staffers will not need to worry about any students violating a dress code and bullying will be minimized because there will not be a reason for students to envy each other due to fashion.

Secondly, students wearing uniforms would benefits parent because they would spend less money buying regular cloths than uniforms. Their save can be used to buy others educational supplies. When it comes to getting ready in the morning parents would struggle less with their kids because they would get ready on their own. Kids will not argue with their parents when it comes to the new trends in fashion. My niece is always arguing with my sister regarding cloths because she argues that her mom is too old she doesn't know about fashion and what is in today. They expend some much time arguing the in many occasions they left home late and arrive to school late. If her school requires uniforms my sister would not have to argue with my niece and her cloths and they would be on time for school.

- Parents tend to benefit the most from a uniform policy because buying uniforms cost less than buying civilian clothes for school. These savings can be used to buy other educational supplies during the school year. The students and parents will also no longer have to argue about the school clothes the children will wear to school. As a result time will be saved in getting to school on time.

Thirdly, when it comes to students they would benefit the most having to wear uniforms. Students will be more responsible, independent, and helpful. They would help their parents in the morning by getting ready on their own. Students would have less pressure when it comes to fashion and to fit in at school. They would worry less of what they wear and put their thought and energy in something for beneficial for them. For example, helped friends that are struggle with homework, study more for a test, or participate more in school events. Uniforms give students a sense of belonging and unity to their school. They will feel that they are part of a family and would wear uniform with pride.

- School uniforms deliver the message that a child is a responsible, independent and helpful person. Therefore the school uniform helps increase the self esteem of a child. As such, the child will take greater pride in his appearance and encourage him or her to take charge of getting dressed for school properly everyday.

In conclusion, schools, parents, and students would benefit with the requirements of wearing uniforms would make their life easier because when it comes to education teachers have more time to teach their curriculum instead of worry about students dress code and the distruction that comes a long with.

- We can therefore conclude that wearing a school uniform carries many benefits for students, school authorities, and parents. In order to ensure a safe learning environment and a more economical school year for the parents, schools should encourage the wearing of uniforms.

Use my suggestions as the template for your revisions :-)
Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Oct 31, 2014   #4
I strongly agree that public school should require students to wear uniforms. Uniforms can give school a better environment and class. It also, helps parents with their budget and time. As for students uniforms help them to fit in at school without fashion controversial or statues..

It would have been much more better if you had created a vague sentence. After all, it is an introduction.


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