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Should schools spend more time in teaching traditional subject or skills?

iisernaw 1 / 2  
Jun 7, 2017   #1
Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subject such as history. Some people think they Should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help student find a job. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

teaching practical skills along with traditional subjects


There are two opinions frequently questioned by people, first, should school give the students more time learning traditional school subject, namely in history and mathematics or attending to trendy skill classes to encourage proficiency in a particular field for helping to gain a good career prospect in the future. I agree schools need to extend time in teaching skills with the following reasons below.

Today, competition for getting job is more increasing firmly as global unemployment has risen since several years ago. International Labour Organization has predicted that joblessness will surpass by end of 2017. In developing country like Indonesia, it turns to be a serious problem caused many unskilled-people living there specifically at young people. This probably comes from their educational system in the past that teachers much prepared for students to master theory through memorizing without applying in practised-skill. To illustrate, in journalism courses, learners are only direct to note and listening to lecturer explanation how to produce creative writing but less practice, it will be pointless and make sure they will be hard to find a job.

Additionally, having special skills for fresh graduate as the company needed is one big chance for them more likely to be accepted than people no have competence in that job specification. The majority of employers think that training an inexperienced-worker only waste their time and money, moreover, the position is urgent need of an expert to handle it immediately. An accounting student from a vocational high school who has completed the internship at corporation tax is more qualified than alumi of accounting major having less work experience in the same qualification owing to hardly ever practice the knowledge acquired.

However, others said learning traditional subject could help students find a job also, all in all, the reasons why schools are expected teaching more skills than conventional lesson due to facing a challenging job ahead an to fulfil the skill required of company.

Thanks for correcting!

Holt - / 7,529 2001  
Jun 7, 2017   #2
Iis, if you review your paraphrased prompt in the first paragraph, you will notice that you did not completely represent the 2 sides are indicated in the original discussion presentation. Since you mentioned that there are two sides to the discussion, you should have presented the supporting and opposing discussions in the opening statement. After that, you should have represented your personal opinion by saying (using the keywords) "I tend to agree that... to a certain degree," Then you can explain your personal opinion, after you have presented the two opposing sides of discussion. By the way, you made a mistake in posting the original prompt requirement, the actual prompt asks for the "extent" of your agreement or disagreement. Extent means "the range, distance, or space that is covered or affected by something or included in something". While extend is explained to mean "to stretch out to the fullest length". The mistake in that single word representation, which totally changed the meaning of the essay prompt will result in a serious point deduction for your paper when it comes to task accuracy. While I can attribute this to your unfamiliarity of the language and allow you concessions for it, the examiner will not be as kind. That is why you have to make sure that you do not use the wrong vocabulary in your essay. If you are not sure of the meaning or application of a word, then do not use it. It is better to say something in a roundabout manner and be scored for it than to use the wrong word and lose points for it. The essay is not asking "To what extend do you agree or disagree?" It is asking "To what EXTENT do you agree or disagree?" This simple word mistake totally changed the method by which you approached the essay and how it was discussed. The prompt requirement was changed and as such, could result in an automatic failure of your essay test.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jun 9, 2017   #3
Well, when it comes to introductory statement, then your task is to simply state the background or the rubric presented in the question. Although you have successfully created an opening paragraph, it seems that you did not cover the essential point in such a paragraph. this word "should school give the students more time learning traditional school subject, namely in history" for example is you only copy and cut and therefore this brings no value. If I were you, then I'd like peruse the question more closely as to understand what's between the lines. From this, then I'd restate using my own words focusing on the keyword given. This way helps you improve your paragraphing skills. Not only this, the paragraph shown above has no outline as this is in conjunction with the following paragraph. Suggestion for this: mention your outline exactly upfront. The two topic sentences from the body paragraphs are side track. This happens perhaps you failed to understand what is being asked from the rubric. Suggestion this: study sample answer, and find a good teacher to help you bring off this matter. Hope this helps :D

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