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Scientific exploration carried out and managed by the state or by private companies?


minhthanh211 1 / 1  
Aug 30, 2019   #1

should scientific research be carried out and controlled by government?



It is sometimes argued that scientific exploration is carried out and managed by the state is better than private companies. Personally, I completely agree with this view.

there are two reasons why I support the scientific projects of the government. The first reason is scientific research which government took responsibility for, will receive a fund for necessary types of equipment and many related things else to make sure experiments and surveys are carried out in the best condition. The second reason is problems about safety in the process as well as the accuracy of research results. The state and appropriate authorities have to consider carefully possibility in each step of each stage before approving them. this means that projects will be completed by well-known scientists and high-educated staff and the research results are guaranteed. As a result, the capacity of the practical application of scientific research is high.

At the same time, I have some reasons to believe that scientific investigations, which belong to private companies, bring certain risks. Firstly, besides legal private companies, there is a lot of illegal ones which must not work in law so their projects are not permitted. Secondly, the owners of private companies have to balance the expenditure on investment and profit they get so the safety is not the highest priority if research results are published and work on people. For example, the cosmetic industry has been grown rapidly with new private cosmetic companies all over the world. Customers believe that their products, which are advertised widely with thorough preparation in image and content, are very safe and effective. However, after quality investigations of the authorities, lots of mistakes are found especially, the concentration of substances harmful to health.

In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I strongly believe that scientific explorations should be carried out under the management of the government.
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Sep 5, 2019   #2
@minhthanh211
Hello there. Welcome to the forum. I hope you find this feedback to be helpful for your writing endeavors as you attempt to improve the overall flow of your writing. You can always keep coming back for more if you wish so.

First and foremost, it would be beneficial if you can balance out the manner in which you explain things in your writing. This pertains to, for instance, having a balanced conclusion and introductory paragraph. Notice how the bulk of your text is dedicated to the body. While there is nothing innately wrong with this, it would be more fruitful if you can try to add more detail into these other two parts as it can assist you in having more dedicated space to explaining things in their entirety.

Having said that, I recommend that you try to simplify your thesis statements. Generally speaking, there's nothing wrong with adding a bit of complexity into your writing. However, what often occurs is that we lose meaning into our writing because we try to compartmentalize all of the written work.
OP minhthanh211 1 / 1  
Sep 5, 2019   #3
@Maria
Thank you so much. Your comment is very clearly and specifically


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