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IELTS Essay - Scientific Research



thanhdan00 3 / 1  
Aug 2, 2026   #1
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is an ongoing debate whether scientific research should be controlled and carried out by the authorities rather than private organizations. While acknowledging the reasons behind this notion, I contend that private sectors remain equally indispensable.

Admittedly, proponents often highlight their in-depth considerations. Chief among these is that strict government oversight ensures the ethical and social conduction of scientific research. For instance, many advanced technologies have become increasingly prevalent in recent years, including facial recognition, biometric engineering, and genetic technologies. Without stringent regulatory frameworks, these powerful technologies could be developed in ways that compromise ethical standards, public safety, and personal privacy by unethical companies. Another important consideration is that private companies prioritize projects with immediate benefits, while authorities often allocate a larger share of the national budget to long-term scientific projects whose benefits are long-term but not immediately profitable. This largely stems from the fact that private sectors are under extreme pressure from investors and board of directors, who demand quarterly profits and immediate commercial returns from projects. With long-term funding from the government, scientists are empowered to conduct projects with greater contribution to societal development.

Despite these valid concerns, I would argue that private companies remain indispensable to scientific research. At the forefront is that the competition among companies creates strong incentives for innovation. To gain competitive advantages, these firms invest heavily in the Research and Development department, leading to the creation of more advanced technologies that improve people's quality of life. Smartphones, for example, have fundamentally transformed the way people communicate, work, and access information. Their rapid development and commercialization were largely driven by technology companies competing to introduce more innovative products, thereby effectively translating scientific discoveries into practical application with tangible benefits.

In light of these considerations, while acknowledging justifications for government control of scientific research, I fundamentally believe that private sectors still remain equally indispensable. While strict government oversight can ensure research that is conducted ethically and safely, private companies also play a vital role in commercializing scientific discoveries and translating them into practical applications that benefit society as a whole
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 16142  
Aug 2, 2026   #2
I would like to remind you that the alloted writing time for this task is only 40 minutes. The main scoring requirements will look at your ability to quickly explain yourself within 5 paragraphs. You gain a better score for each consideration based on the quality of your writing, clarity of your thoughts, and ability to deliver a full explanation within the allowed time. You will not get extra points for writing extra long essay that, during an actual test, could result in an open ended essay, resulting in a failing final score.

That said, the minimum sentence requirement for the introduction paragraph is 3 sentences. You wrote only 2 sentences, The thesis statement is missing, Additionally, you did not use the correct format response which requires an extent representation of your opinionl. So this paragraph will receive a failing score during preliminary TA scoring considerations.

You already discussed 2 reasons in the first reasoning paragraph. This should have been separated into 2 paragraph discussion points for ample reasoning development. The addition of the 3rd reason further showed that you are not well informed about the required formatting guidelines and discussion requirements. While this looks good in an academic paper, it does not look good in a format specific English test. So the lack of proper discussion development for the 2 ideas presented in the 1st reasoning paragraph will pull down the score for your essay.

These would actually be the main reasons why your paper may have a low passing or final failing score in an actual test setting. Try to write up to 300 words only and focus on the quality and clarity of your writing with your next practice test that I look forward to reading soon.


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