Writing Task 2 - Essay about should scientific research be conducted by private companies or the gov

Task 2:
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by private companies rather than governments.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

There is often much debate around the fact that scientific discoveries should be conducted by private corporations rather than the government. While this trend may bring about some benefits, I would argue that they are eclipsed by the drawbacks.

There are numerous advantages to letting scientific research be controlled by private companies. First and foremost, it is recommended that such companies tend to meet society's expectations faster than the government. This can be explained by the fact that investing money to conduct research is likely to enhance productivity and result, hence, introducing to the masses a number of desirable products. Secondly, non-governmental companies should be in charge of carrying out scientific research in order to consolidate their reputation and position in the international arena. This helps them attract more human resources and reap profits.

On the other hand, there are some good reasons why the authorities should take responsibility for scientific research. Firstly, it is advisable that the government is able to ensure safety and many unexpected outcomes that might occur. To be more specific they can rely on the capital flows to equip high-end facilities and support a group of scientists in terms of checking the quality and potential consequences. As a result, it would become more reliable and ethical to the consumers and their business partners. Additionally, while some independent companies seek for profits, such research conducted by local authorities might be accessible to all social classes. For instance, most citizens are able to prepare a Kit test themselves due to the convenience and the availability.

In conclusion, while there are some benefits for private companies to carry out scientific research such as rapidly responding to people's demands and enhancing the reputation in the market, I am of the opinion that the government is much better in this field regarding minimizing the risks of these studies and the accessibility.

This is an incorrect restatement. This is not a fact. It is actually a debated topic and should be reflected as such in the reworded presentation. This inaccuracy will result in points deductions in terms of paraphrasing accuracy.

The more accurate comparison discussion format was not used in this essay. The incorrect discussion format removed the cohesiveness of the discussion but still contained coherent discussion points. So the essay will not receive full scoring consideration due to the lack of comparison discussions in relation to the given discussion scenarios.

That said, the essay itself will still get a passing mark although it may not be as high as expected. That is due to the under developed discussion paragraphs. The reason for which I explained in the previous paragraph.

@Holt
Can you suggest some words to replace for my previous mistake?