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Scientist found that BRCA 1 and 2 are powerful cancer genes markers


Sari Trisna 7 / 11  
Sep 28, 2016   #1
Why I won't Get the Genetics Test for Breast Cancer (Summary)

Scientist found that BRCA 1 and 2 are powerful cancer genes markers, most. If those genes mutated, It could increase the possibility breast or ovarian cancer. Both of them had a irritate treatment even though it was very precise. We could amputate our breast or ovaries if we desired to cut off the risk. Of course, it was he worst choice. Because of it came from genes in DNA, It was possible that those genes were decreased for generations. A senior researcher from National Cancer Institute in Maryland, charged the writer's family tree to an online BRCA risk-assesstment tool. The results showed that she had a small risk to affected by breast cancer although her great aunt and her dad's cousin died of breast cancer. Most of women who had a positive result decided to remove their breast or ovaries.

andika_soppeng - / 16 2  
Sep 28, 2016   #2
Hi

Sari Trisna

your writing is very interesting to read, there are some of errors which you need to pay more attention, however.

Scientist found that BRCA???EXPLAIN THIS WORDS 1 and 2 are powerful cancer ...
If those genes ARE mutated, It could increase...
Both of them had a AN irritate IRRITATED treatment even though ...
Of course, it was he THE worst choice OPTION. Because of BECAUSE it came from genes ...
... the writer's family tree to an online BRCA???EXPLAIN THIS WORDS risk-assesstment ASSESSMENT tool. The results RESULT showed that she had a small risk to BE affected by breast cancer ...

NOTE:

PAY MORE ATTENTION

1. SPELLING
2. SUBJECT VERB AGREEMENT
THE DIFFERENT BETWEEN BECAUSE AND BECAUSE OF
==> WHILE BECAUSE OF SHOULD BE FOLLOWED BY NOUN, BECAUSE HAVE TO BE FOLLOWED BY S + V

ATTEMPT TO USE ANOTHER PATTERN,
NOT ONLY S + V ALTHOUGH/WHILE S + V, BUT ALSO ALTHOUGH/WHILE S + V, S + V

YOUR WRITE VERY WELL,
KEEP TRYING
Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Sep 28, 2016   #3
Hi Saritrisna,after reading your summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps useful for you.

1.Wrong spelling words
-Of course, it was he worst choice.----> the worst

... family tree to an online BRCA risk-assesstmenttool . ---> assesment tools

2.Both of them had a irritate treatments even though it was very precise.----> had an irritated
3. It could be increase the possibility ...


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