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Scientists discover a planet similar to Earth. Summary Article from National Geographic


Heru22 5 / 7 1  
Aug 25, 2016   #1
hay fellas, pleas give feedback for my summary article, i summarize this from article in link below :

news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/08/earth-mass-planet-proxima-centauri-habitable-space-science/

Lately, Medias report a rumor about finding a planet which has sane characteristic as earth. The planet is circling the star closet to sun and called Proxima century. Observations in Chile using telescope find that planet is a big as our world and it has warm enough condition for liquid water to survive on its surface. Proxima was funded by a team of scientists who worked on the pole red pot project. For them, it is not surprise innovation because they have been find out some planet in same orbit like Proxima. In their earlier research, there were interesting signs that at least one planet could be there and they detected the planet by using some comprehensive search. The observations taken between 2000 and 2014.

Erpin92 3 / 3  
Aug 25, 2016   #2
they have been find out some planet in ...
it should be finding because it is present perfect continuous tense.

The observations taken between 2000 and 2014
The observations were taken between 2000 and 2014
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Aug 26, 2016   #3
Hi Heru, below are my thoughts on your essay.

- Lately, Mediasthe media reports
- has sanethe same characteristic
- as the earth.
- The planet is circling the star closes t to the - find that the planet is
- as big as our
- For themthis team ,
- it is not surprisea surprising innovation
- because they have been findfound out some
- planet in the same orbit like Proxima.
- by using some comprehensive search.
- The observations were taken between 2000 and 2014.

There you have it Heru, the above remarks will hopefully help you out in your revision and for future writing reference, when you are writing a summary such as this one for the National geographic, you have to be very specific, the words such as "some", may not be the right words to incorporate in this particular summary of an article, you have to be definite with our information and make sure that they are accurate enough in order to create a solid summary of the given story.
hirani03 36 / 50 5  
Aug 26, 2016   #4
Hello, there are some corrections for your summary. :)

Lately, MediasMedia(The singular for media is medium)reportreports a rumor about finding a ...

Proxima was fundedfounded by a team of scientists who ...

... because they have been findfound out some planetplanets in same orbit like Proxima.

The observations takentook between 2000 and 2014.
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 26, 2016   #5
hi,,,,

this is some correction for you

Lately, Mediasthe media reports a rumor about finding a ...
... circling the star closet to the sun and....
Observations in Chile using telescope find that planet is a bigChile observe by using telescope ...
in the same orbit like Proxima
The observations were taken between 2000 and 2014.

thank you


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