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IELTS General Writing Task 1: Seaside Hotel Booking

roy_leung 1 / 2  
Mar 5, 2021   #1

trip for the South seaside area

Dear Sir or Madam,

This is Roy, I am currently planning a Family trip regarding for the South seaside area between 10 - 12 March 2021. As search over the Internet, Seaside hotel would be the one having the highest ranking for selection. I would like to ask for room availability of the above mentioned 2 days.

There is total 3 persons will stay for these 2 days with 2 adults and a 1-year-old baby. I would like to reserve for 1 semi-double bedroom with a baby bed and baby chair. Please help to provide the detail information about this room reservation offer, including the facilities, swimming pool, gym room, restaurant (including menu) and room service at your hotel with the opening hours.

We are looking forward to hearing your reply. We would like to enjoy your hotels professional service at the coming wonderful holiday as soon as possible.

Yours Sincerely,

Roy Leung


Nowadays, in the modern era, there are too many events available to child for their extra-activities. Some active children may affect others in a group to doing the same event or follow their ideas. However, some Parents do not satisfy with this and trying to arrange all activities for their children by their expectation. is it a good and well arrangement?

In current century, internet would provide many ideas for children to explorer the new activities. That is no boundary to limit the information retrieval. No matter in school, classmate may cross sharing their ideas. As many idea exposure, Children and Teenagers may follow the most fashion one for learning and studying.

I would not believe that parents would always be possible to plan the activities to their child as their expect. As there is many new activities, Parents would not always be able to understand those ideas and hobbies. Most likely, Parents would brief study what kind of current popular event of their child doing.

In a globalization environment, activities would be cross cultural. If parents still trying to decide all the activities to their child which do not suitable for them or do not follow their hobbies. It would be slow down their creative mind set and learning explorer. The time wasting may cause their child to eliminate their learning motivation.

By the above assumption, Parents should not be possible to arrange those what their expected event to their children. I do believe parents would only be able to support what their child wants and provide the right direction to them. And possibility to avoid the illegal action which about what the event performing.

Parents would not be possible to decide all event to their child. The better way is to support their child to explorer their hobbies and trying all the new idea during the free time. Also, to avoid any illegal action of any activity would still require parents to make understand what their child working on.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,535 3447  
Mar 6, 2021   #2
We allow only 1 essay per thread. One more double essay posting and your account will be suspended !!!

Your first essay is a grammatical mess. You need to focus your lessons on the following:

- singular v. plural
- present, past, future tense usage
- simple sentence structuring
- punctuation usage

I cannot even begin to explain how grammatically incorrect your presentation is. I would have to rewrite the whole essay to show you how to correct all the errors in every sentence and paragraph presentation.

It is important that you stop writing practice essays at the moment. That is because you are still incapable of creating a basic English sentence, much less a paragraph. You would immediately get a failing score in the LR, and GRA sections based on this presentation, resulting in a final failing score.

Work on improving your vocabulary first, then learn the basic structures of a simple sentence. There are free apps that can help you do that.

Do not focus on the essay exercises yet. Your ESL skills will not allow you to create the kind of sentences that can help you pass the test yet.
OP roy_leung 1 / 2  
Mar 6, 2021   #3
Dear Holt,

Thanks for your valuable feedback of my Essay. Also, thanks for sharing this Forum's rule.

I understand your feedback. I will study the foundation English structure again before practice any the ietls essay writing.

Thanks so much and stay healthy.


Roy Leung
OP roy_leung 1 / 2  
Mar 17, 2021   #4
Dear All, I took some online course and tried to rewrite this part 1. I believe my writing still has issues, but i hopefully can get any opinions from you all for improvement. Thanks!

Dear Sir/Madam,

I will have a 5 days vacation (20-25 Mar,2021) next week at Seaside region. I plan to stay at your hotel with 2 adults and 2 two-years-old children.

I want to reserve 1 sea-view room and 1 semi-double room. For Sea-view room, I and my wife look for any special room service for our wedding anniversary celebration. For Semi-double room, It is to my housekeeper and 2 children. We want to know any cartoon decoration room with toys provided and music function.

Besides room service, I look for Gym room and Swimming Pool, and my wife asks for Spa service. Please introduce the hotel facilities in detail.

Please advice any shuttle bus service to your hotel from Seaside Central. We will arrive there at around 12:00pm 20Mar2021 and then heading to your hotel.

Thanks and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Sincerely,

Roy Leung

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