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TOEFL: Most of secondary schools include the art and music course in their annual program


djanat 19 / 29  
Mar 14, 2010   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Most of secondary schools include the art and music course in their annual program. Others deny including those courses for some reasons. Personally, I think that studying art and music as a mandatory course is not a shrewd step to the schools if they really think about the students.

First of all, the students at secondary school will not take any benefits from the art and music courses. The prospect for the future of the students does not depend on any way if they take these courses or not. The student does not need the art and the music to serve his or her country. They need other important courses such as mathematics, physics and or science.

In addition, not all students want to study art and music courses. Most of them think that they have enough courses at secondary school. It is though to have one in addition. Others male students do not want to study this course because they think that art and music were made only for women who are sensible about this. So, secondary school should take in consideration the choice of their students.

Lastly, there are other courses more important for the students in their lives than studying art and music. The first aid course is one of these more important courses. It provides students a lot of information that they can us them in their daily lives. For example, if the student witnesses a car accident, he or she will use his knowledge learnt at the secondary school to save the life people involve in this accidant.

Some people believe that art and music are vital for students because they make them a tolerant persons .this believe makes of people who did not study art and music such sadistic persons which it is not true.

It is good to have some knowledge about art and music , but it will be tedious to have them as a mandatory courses at secondary school. If the students want to study them they can attend art and music universities forward.

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yvette 3 / 10  
Mar 14, 2010   #2
i agree with the statement but you makea good point especially with the first aid class
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 15, 2010   #3
Personally, I think that studying art and music as a mandatory course is not a shrewdstep for the schools to take if they are really concerned about the students.

The prospect for the future of the students does not depend in any way if they take these courses or not. The student does not need the art and the music to serve his or her country. They need other important courses such as mathematics, physics and or science.

Yes, but art and music have value that is absolute. If science helps you get a job, that is one step toward having an enjoyable life, but after you get a job you need to be able to appreciate art and music. Without art and music, why bother to get a job? Life is about more than just work and survival. Besides, art and music activate areas of the brain that would not be used otherwise, contributing to brain development.

In addition, not all students want to study art and music courses. --- that is true! Good argument.

Most of them think that they have enough courses at secondary school. It is tough to have one more, in addition to the others.

Also, male students do not want to study music and art, because they think that art and music were made only for women who are sensible about this. ----- that is just a silly idea. Do you really know male students who think it is feminine to be an artist or musician?

So, secondary school should take in consideration the choices of their students. ---- good sentence!

Some people believe that art and music are vital for students because they make them tolerant people. This implies that people who did not study art and music are intolerant, which is not true.

It is good to have some knowledge about art and music , but it will be tedious to have them as a mandatory courses at secondary school. The students want to study them they can attend art and music universities forward in the future.

Well, I don't agree with your argument, but your English is very good! Art and music are beneficial for more than just making people tolerant. Art and music are the things that make life worth living. Everything you enjoy involves art or music. Every product that we design is a work of art. Every sentence we write or speak is a work of art, musical language.

:-)
mocixuan 4 / 10  
Mar 17, 2010   #4
but it will be tedious to have them as a mandatory courses at secondary school.

he or she will use his knowledge learnt at the secondary school to save the life people involve in this accidant accident.

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