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Writing Task 1 - How to see the thoughts you don't know you are having - Caroline Williams


Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
How to see the thoughts you don't know you are having - Caroline Williams

Every second, large of quantities idea emerge on our mind. Those are in an unconscious area in which almost all people are not aware of what their thinking. In actual fact, a few experiments have been developing to touch our hidden area. Harvard University's Scholars carried out the research by using quick response test to exposing unconscious behaviour regarding origin, sexuality and gender. Unfortunately, it is strenuous to catch. While, another researcher, Russell Hurlburt from University of Nevada Las Vegas, provides a different approach. He commanded volunteers to wear an earpiece which will randomly beep for six times a day, then ask them to note their mind. After a half of decade, he has concluded that minority of people have an idea what they are thinking.

Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hello

Your text will sound much better if you adjust some of the sentences as follows;

Every second [...] a number of different thoughts come into my mind.
Those are [...] This happens in the realm of unconscious, which is why most of these thoughts are hardly rational.
In actual fact [...] There have been conducted a few experiments on how our unconscious psyche operates.
the research [...] with respect to what account for people's unconscious reactions to the subjects of...
While [...] no need for this word.
provides [...]deployed...
commanded [...] asked...
which will [...] that would... beep [...] for [...] six times a day...
then ask [...] while telling them to write down their would-be triggered mental responses.
that [...] only the [...] minority of people...

I hope this will help. Regards.


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