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How to see the thoughts you don't know you are having - Article Summary - To know your brain


Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Oct 28, 2016   #1
How to see the thoughts you don't know you are having - Caroline Williams

Every second, large of quantities idea emerge on our mind. Those are in unconscious area in which almost all people are not aware of what their thinking. In actual fact, a few experimental have been developing to touch our hidden area. Harvard University's Scholars carried out the research by using quick response test to exposing unconscious behaviour regarding origion, sexuality and gender. Unfortunately, it is strenuous to catch. While, another researcher, Russell Hurlburt from University of Nevada Las Vegas, provides different approach. He commanded volunteers to wear an earpiece which will randomly beep for six times a day, then ask them to note their mind. After a half of decade, he has concluded that minority of people have an idea what they are thinking.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Oct 28, 2016   #2
Hi Lincoln..
These are my thoughts. Actually, this is good, but I offer you a few improvements.
GOOD LUCK


Those are in AN unconscious area in which WHERE (please you pick up the proper conjunction) almost all people...
In AN actual fact, a few experimental ...
MEANWhile (you needed a transitive word. You have to remember that "while" is the conjunction) , another researcher, (...) Las Vegas, provides PROVIDED A different approach.

After a half of decade, he has concluded that minority ...

Note: Please, you pay attention to use of past and perfect tense. I have found you were sometimes confused to order them. Besides that, you have to distinguish between use of the transitive word and conjunction.

Overall, it is a good job


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