Hello guys, please give your correction about my summary.
you can see the article by clicking this link :
news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/08/how-to-see-american-solar-eclipse-2017/
How to see the upcoming "great American eclipse"
Since 1979, total eclipse never crosses American continent but in August 2017 you can get a scarce experience in your life because the total eclipse will cross the continental U.S.
On August 21, 2017, for the first time since 1979, the shadow of a total solar eclipse will sweep from sea to shining sea, following a 8.600-mile path that takes it from Oregon to South Carolina.
It can be predicted that almost 200 million Americans will come to Carbondal, Illinois to see the total solar eclipse. Therefore, if you want to get the best viewing spot, you should make your travel plans now.
If you miss this celestial event, there will be another total solar eclipse in the United States, sweeping from California to Florida, on August 12, 2045. Therefore, you need to be patient to wait this celestial event.
Hi Erpin.
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I have read this writing closely. I cannot give many comments for this because you should get the point of making a summary. Honestly, your writing is quick messy. This was written unsystematically. The summary consists of the topic and supporting sentences. Following that, you don't copy words directly from the original article. You have to paraphrase them, no direct quotes. One of the most factors is the flow of your writing. You are supposed to explain systematically. The simple way to make the good flow is using appropriate linking words.
I believe you can show the better progress if you wanna provide more time to practice again and again.
Good Luck
Hi Erpin, below are thoughts on your essay.
- crosses the American continent
- buthowever in August 2017
- OnIn August 21, 2017,
- will sweep from sea to shining sea,
- patient to wait for this celestial event.
There you have it Erpin, as you can see, there's not much to correct in your summary. A few missing linking verbs that will complete the sentence and I hope you follow suit. This minor details are definitely crucial as it will affect the overall impact of the essay as well as the idea that you are trying to convey to your readers.
Overall, it is a well structured summary, very brief as it is and straight to the point and what is needed of the prompt.
I hope to review more of your essays soon and keep writing.
Hi Erpin!
Since 1979, total eclipse never crossescrossed American continent but in August 2017 you canwill get a scarce experience in ...
... will sweep from sea to shining sea, following a 8.600-mile path that takestake 8,600 miles pathit from Oregon to South Carolina.
Actually, I'm confused with your summary. I hope you can write better summary for the next time. Good luck!!
Since 1979, total eclipse never crossescrossed American continent (past > 1979)
... because the total eclipse willwould cross the continental U.S. (past > total eclipse has been occur)
... shadow of a total solar eclipse wouldwill sweep from sea to shining sea,
It cancould be predicted that almost 200 million Americans willwould come to Carbondal, Illinois ...
