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IqbalThemi 44 / 46 13  
May 29, 2015   #1
Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work different organisations.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Working is a vital aspect to support people needs. As such, some people prepare to do jobs with their own colleagues in the same organization in lifetime so that they can know with each other characters. Having said that, for others, this is greater to work in different people from many organizations since they can develop new relationship to plenty of people. Meanwhile, as far as I am concerned, people can feel enjoyable working is the main reason why they are very fond of working in the same community, whilst having new close relation is benefit of work in different people.

Broadly speaking, workers tend to think that having the same friends in working is going to obtain more enjoyable. To illustrate, when you work in one company only in long run, you can be easy to ask helping from others for your problem suddenly. Not only this, you also have no doubt to communicate with your partners of work because you know them well. As a result, doing job with partners of one organization ensures people to survive in their career.

On the other hand, laborers have many relations if they work in different communities. For instance, in different companies you can meet many people from some backgrounds and places. From this, you can develop new close relationship to make you easily to adapt in doing your work. As a consequence, Having experiences of work in some organizations leads you to improve your wider horizons and relations for life.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that both situations of working have the same merits. Therefore, I strongly suggest that all of this depends on people's characters to choose which one is better based on their life needs.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 6, 2015   #2
- Working is a vital aspect to support peoplepeoples needs.

- As such, some people prepare to do jobs with their own colleagues in the same organization in lifetime so that they can know with each other characters.

- Having said that, for others, thisit is greater to work inwith different people from many organizations since they can develop new relationship to plenty of people.

- Meanwhile, as far as I am concerned, people can feel enjoyablejoy working, is the main reason...

- Broadly speaking, workers tend to think that having the same friends in workingat work is going to obtain more enjoyable.

- To illustrate, when you work in one company only in long run, you can be easy to ask helpinghelp from others for your problem suddenly.in case of emergencies.

- Not only this, you also have no doubt to communicate with your partners ofat work because you know them well.

Iqbal, I have made a few corrections as you can see above. I agree with you though that changing workplace from time to time is quite exhausting. It's another process of making friends, knowing people and creating a blanket of security. Honestly, if I were to choose on changing careers, I still would however I would make a mark first like spend a few years, build a career and make sure that it's a career were I can get a good recommendation in the end.

Well, as usual make sure that you proof read and you check your spelling. On this essay good job at making your point and keep writing.

Cheers!!!
alif 12 / 13 2  
Jun 7, 2015   #3
hi iqbal,
actually, your idea is excellent, but i have suggestion for you.

On the other hand, laborers have many relations if they work in different communities.( I think you need to explain your idea here) For instance, in different companies you can meet many people from some backgrounds and places.(i think you need to make complete sentence) From this, you can develop new close relationship to make you easily to adapt in doing your work. As a consequence, Having experiences of work in some organizations leads you to improve your wider horizons and relations for life.

All in all, this paragraph needs a lot of explanation.

good luck !!


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