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You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors the city


Quoccuong 1 / -  
Aug 16, 2019   #1

Write a letter of application to the tourism office



Dear Sir or Madam,
I'm Cuong. I'm studying at Moscow University in tourism. I've seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around the city and I was so excited at that time. Fortunately, I have spare time at the weekend now and I desire to challenge myself as a tour guide to improve my tourist skills. I'd rather guide English or Russian speaking visitors. I'm a talkative, attentive, hard-working and open-minded person, so I think I would suit this job. When I was a schoolboy, I've hosted many surfers in my beautiful and ancient city - Hue. I've been hanging out with a large number of foreigners, so I'm quite confident that I will do it well. I appreciate it if you can lay believe in me.

I hope to cooperate with you, Cuong.
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Aug 17, 2019   #2
@Quoccuong
Hi. Welcome here! We're happy you've chosen us to review your writing. You can always come back for more.

I heavily recommend adding more dramatization into your writing through incorporating more descriptive lines. If you do this, you'll be able to utilize your space to have more signifiers throughout. This will also help the reader fathom the depth of your emotion a bit more.

Furthermore, do work on the pattern of your writing. The structure is off-putting because of how dense all the information is. Try adding dyanism by having more punctuation throughout.

When you have descriptions of yourself, try to solidify it by having real-life examples of how you have displayed it. Remember to sell yourself more as an individual.
pato_rivasN 2 / 2  
Aug 18, 2019   #3
@Quoccuong
Hi, your letter is good, but it is also very short, I would try adding at least one or two more paragraphs.
describe yourself in a more profound way and explain where each of your adjectives is coming from.
explain how the employer would beneffit from giving this opportunity for you.
coke 14 / 28 13  
Aug 19, 2019   #4
@Quoccuong

Hi,

I think you have put in good information in your letter. It flows and is organized; however, there should be some linking words between sentences to make it more cohesive. One more thing, I don't think you should use contractions in this letter because the receiver is a complete stranger and it makes this letter a formal one.


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