I've just seen a brilliant program about dolphins on television. Which program have you enjoyed?

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I've just seen a brilliant program about dolphins on television.

Which program have you enjoyed recently? How much television do you watch?

Nowadays, the electronic items are developing and expand around of local market and foreign market . Inside this, electronic items as laptop, telephone or cell phones more popular in the Vietnam central, because it attract more younger people and elder people, oldest people use it, Follow survey, Over 90% of people using laptop for watching movies, news such as BBC channel, Rachel and Jun channel...Recently, I like watching about chemistry of Thoi Son 2 channel by Laptop because when I watched it , I could expanding and improving about chemistry abilities and how to modulation it. In addition, I watched it because I extremely like chemistry and I want to become good scientist. Of course. Besides watching Thoi Son 2 channel that I also watching some channels in my freetime and total over 20 cannels or program such as Veritasium, jomaier.... Channels. I watch it for relaxing and let go of stress after do hard work or hard study. Moreover, I also watch it for expanding and knowledge about galaxy and interest things all of the world.

The first half of your essay is nothing but an unrelated information presentation. This is actually a statement response rather than an essay. There are only 2 qquestions you need to respond to. The direct response is a requirement for this presentation. Bluff sentences meant to extendthe discussion without a relation to the actual topic does not help the presentation. These surveys and percentage of viewership, other than yours, has no actual value to the presentation.

The second half of your essay also runs opposite to the questions provided. You are asked a program. Singular. Your response is in the plural form. That is a task discussion failure as you did not respond in singular form to the question. neither did you tell the reader how must I.V. you watch in hourly or percentage form.