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[IELTS] Select students with academic ablity or teach them together?


kelp0308 4 / 15  
Mar 25, 2011   #1
Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities study together. Discuss both views and give your own opinone.

Below is my answer sample:
The education of youngsters is always a controvesial issue, as it is associated with the future of human race. But due to the scarcity of the educational resources, schools cannot meet all the demands to study, espeically in university level.

It is claimed that colleges should afford standards choosing students to enroll, while others insist that is is advantageous to teach students at various level together. They are both partilly resonable in my view.

Provided some requirements, the selected students may share more in common, such as the academic abilities and personal chareacteristics. Therefore, instructors could concentrate on solving their common problems, and then make the schooling more effective and efficient. Moreover, based on the similar backgrouds and situations of the youths, it is easy to set the curriculums and realize the planed goals. Boys and girls tend to enjoy the developments physcally, mentally and psychologically. As a result, it is expected that they can be more employable along with the adept techniques as well as adequate knowledge.

There are benefits educating the young at different academic abilities as well. Undoubtedlly, each individual is unique and owns the strengths others do not possess. For example, those children who do not have a strong affinity to sciences subjects, e.g. math and physics, may be talented at studying liberal courses suprisely. If taught together, students are believed to learn from each other, and be motivated to acquire knowledge of different fields. In addtion to the positive influence from peers, teaching in groups also make good use of currents resource and increase the student-teacher ratio which can furture reduce the operating cost of the goverment.

In conclusion, both views share pros and cons. But in order to effectively combat the problem relating to scarcity of educational resources, I think of schooling children with all types together as better option. Nevertheless, it is still tough problem for educators to seek better methodology with which students of different levels could fostered well-rounded and efficiently. [329 words]

ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Mar 26, 2011   #2
Hi,
first of all there are numerous spelling and preposition mistakes. When you are writing your essay here, a wrong spelling is automatically underlined with a red line. Do keep a check on that, else you will drastically lose marks in the writing section.

-you have presented good allround view on the topic. You can also write that- education is to prepare the students meeting the demands and challenges in the future. When a student is working,they might have to face both the uneducated and the highly intellectual brains. So they need to learn how to co-operate with variety of people, as in a class,all students do not possess the same intellect.

Good luck n cheers :)
BrookW 4 / 12  
Mar 26, 2011   #3
Hi,

I think the topic is talking about "which approach is the better one for schooling system", but not mentioned the argument is resulting from the scarcity of educational resources. Also, from my perspective, both of these views can not help a lot if do there is a educational resources problem. So, may be not appropriate to link the educational resources problem to your point.
OP kelp0308 4 / 15  
Mar 26, 2011   #4
Yes, maybe I didn't catch the core problem to this topic, thus I made a wrong or unsuitable assumption to the backgroud.
After the writing, I myself feel uncomfortable to adimit any correlation between the scacity and the options.
Thanks.

So they need to learn how to co-operate with variety of people, as in a class,all students do not possess the same intellect.

Good point, thanks.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 27, 2011   #5
Let's use "the" with "human race"
...with the future of the human race.

Undoubtedly , each individual is unique and owns the strengths others do not possess.-----very good sentence. I just had to fix the spelling of a word. You have LOTS of spelling errors, but you can just use Mozilla FireFox as your browser, and it has an automatic spellchecker. Use Firefox, and when you see that a word is underlined, right click it and select the correct spelling.

Nevertheless, it is still tough problem for educators to seek better methodology with which students of different levels could fostered foster well-rounded development and make progress efficie ntly.

:-)
OP kelp0308 4 / 15  
Mar 28, 2011   #6
Thank you so much, maybe next time I can edit in MS Word instead of txt editor.


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