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Self Study Ielts Task 1: Population for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012


Nguyet Tran 4 / 8 1  
Feb 20, 2020   #1

analysis of indian turtles population



The line graph illustrates the number of varied turtle types in India from 1980 to 2012. Unit is measured in index.

Overall, during 32 years since 1980, there was a dramatic drop in the number of Leatherback Turtles. Olive Ridley Turtles in contrast, increased significantly in figures. The other two types of turtles (Green Turtles and all species) had their index fluctuated over the period.

With regard to Leatherback Turtles, their population reached a peak of about 110 in 1987. Likewise, all species of turtle number had the same trend in this period. However, while the amount of all species turtle still remained nearly 110 in 2012, this index in Leatherback Turtles was a free fall (generally 60).

Meanwhile, Olive Ridley Turtles population far exceeded to marginally 140 in 1997 until it reduced to relatively 130. In addition, the statistics of Green Turtles experienced a slight decrease recorded at 90 in the last year.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,765 4768  
Feb 21, 2020   #2
Your paragraphs need to be consisted with at least 3 sentences to be considered full paragraphs. You have some presentations with only 2 sentences. That misses the minimum sentence mark. You have not written enough words to be accurately judged for the rest of the scoring requirements as well. With only 154 words, you wrote only 4 words over the minimum requirement. That limits your scoring potential based on all scoring considerations to only the slimmest passing potential. Try to write at least 175 words so that you will have a better chance of getting a passing mark or above passing mark on your next practice essay.

You did a good job in presenting the basic information from the line graph. Though the grammar is faulty at times, your report is still understandable. However, you did not do comparison discussions where you could have to help increase your word count. The comparative discussions stem from the years when the populations for certain turtle species overlapped. That is the kind of information that helps you write more and highlight your ability to develop a coherent and cohesive report presentation. Try to do that next time.
sandyhsu 3 / 5  
Feb 22, 2020   #3
... the number of varied turtle types various species of turtle in India ...

Overall, it is evident that, during the given 32 years period since 1980, there was a ... Olive Ridley Turtles in contrast, Olive Ridley Turtles increased ...

your overview is a bit loose, you can try to use some linking words ex: while, whereas
OP Nguyet Tran 4 / 8 1  
Feb 22, 2020   #4
Thank you so much for your valuable feedback @Holt @sandyhsu


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