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What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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Sep 13, 2018   #1

mental issues caused sometimes by heavily Internet usage

The Internet gives us many benefits and convenience. It totally changes our lifestyle. Following the Internet, it also brings an enormous problem to society, and there are many effects that we can't be predicted. Therefore, an understanding of the causes and a discussion of methods to deal with this issue is important.

The biggest reason is the Internet is too convenient, it can easy to post and get any information. People also need not use a real name on the internet and do not have to responsible for the behavior, there are no rule and law, although some website has a security system to prevent, people just need to set up the new account.

The biggest problem is a mental issue, people getting more and more pressure and anxiety from the Internet. A lot of people like to bully and judge others on the Internet, even do not know the truth, just following others. This can cause huge pressure on people who were bullied from online. There are too many fake news on the Internet that content let human feel uncomfortable.So mental problems are the most serious problem.

Here I will give suggestion to deal with this issue. Every government needs to create the laws for the Internet and conduct strictly. Tracking who is the first person to spread the information , and punish the website which does not post real news.
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Sep 14, 2018   #2
Lee, your presentation is way off base when considering the required discussion presentation. You did an introduction to the topic twice instead of a single prompt paraphrase for this 4 paragraph essay. Your 4 paragraphs should be composed of:

1. Prompt restatement
2. One problem reference
3. One solution reference
4. Concluding summary that repeats the information from the first 3 paragraphs in a new presentation.

The biggest writing problem that you have in this essay is your inability to divide your paragraphs into sentences. By using run on sentences in every paragraph, you do not accomplish the required 3-5 sentence discussion structure per paragraph. Without the proper discussion format, your essay not get a passing score in the GRA section.

Overall, because of the combined TA, LR, C&C, and GRA problems in this essay, there is no possibility that this will get a passing score in an actual setting. You have to read the other examples located in this forum for the task 2 essay so that you can get a better idea as to how to develop and present your response essays.

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