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Service Helps International Students Bridge Cultures


agungdanprakoso 5 / 4  
Sep 20, 2016   #1
Service Helps International Students Bridge Cultures

Have you ever involved in public service helps ? how was the feel it ? Nowadays, i want to highlight regarding what is the merits of public service helps for life society ?

One all of organizations namely ISMA realizes that the public service helps is tremendously crucial thing for increasing caring each other in the amid of socialization. That is why, ISMA makes marvelous programs for approaching the members into citizen such as painting houses, plucking weeds, fixing fences and plating flowers. According to The Battalion Daily, impact of public service helps is exceedingly significant for raising socialization soul. Almost of ex-members who involved the programs are feeling deeply emotional. They said, when they follow the activities that feel how the vastly important of socialization is !

In my opinion, it is out of box problem solve in this era where huge amount of people feel individual and antisocial. The programs can decline the level of careless in the world. Is not that the essential of human life is taking and giving each other ?
wew018 - / 20 9  
Sep 20, 2016   #2
Hi @agungdanprakoso

Your composition is good. It is organized however, there are some things that you have to consider whenever you express yourself in the language like word ordering, correct word usage and stuff which I saw in your work. I have made some corrections in your composition hopefully you consider.

how wasdoesitthe feel it ?

Nowadays,Ii want to highlight regarding what isare the merits of public service helps for life in our society ? > Or you can use this sentence instead:

"I will be highlighting the merits of public service help in our society and what makes it advantageous."

One all of organizations namely ISMA > ISMA, one of these service help organizations, ... > Use intervening phrase here, for you to separate two different ideas.

plan ting

Almost all of its ex-members who are involved in their programs are feeling deeply emotional.

They said, when they follow the activities,thatthey feel how the vastlyreally important of socialization is.!

In my opinion, it is out of the box which we can solve in this era ...

TheSuch programs...

Is not that the essential of human life is taking and giving each other ? > After all, human life is about taking and giving with each other

Overall, it is a great essay. Hopefully, you write more and practice so that you can make yourself comfortable in expressing yourself in English. Good luck!


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