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Several benefits of practicing meditation


NinaJoesuf25 36 / 66 4  
Nov 13, 2016   #1
Youngey Minyur Rinpoche, a meditation master, explained about how to meditation. He told that practicing meditation is not about to make to refresh our mind. It then can to alter difficulties into opportunities. In any case, it is believed that meditation have several considerable benefits to transform suffering into enjoyment and look for solutions for some problems. He emphasized that the advantages about this activity was narrowed down into three levels. It was consisted by refreshing the mind, opening the heart for love and compassion and awakening wisdom. Youngey suggested realizing our basic goodness, taking potential, capacity and good qualities into account for getting the point of joy of living. Surprisingly, he gave a sort of meditative techniques for basic level. It was easy to follow for mostly people since we needed to sit down comfortably, closed our eyes and totalled our breath for at least five minutes. Subsequently, people could add more time, whereas it was not suggested to beginner.
Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Nov 13, 2016   #2
Hi,what a good summary, but let me give several advice, perhaps useful for you.
1. It then can to alter difficulties into opportunities. In any case, it is believed that.... ----> "can" cannot meet with "to".

2. ... meditation is not about to make to refresh our mind
3. consisted by ----> the right collocation is consisted of
abangabul93 15 / 27  
Nov 14, 2016   #3
Hai @NIna, I got some advice for your writing:

1. ... explained about how to (DO) meditation.

2. ... is not about to make to refresh our mind (SO FRESH).

3. It then can to alter difficulties into opportunities. (CAN +V1)

4. ... believed that meditation have (HAS) several considerable (...) enjoyment and look(S) for solutions for ...
alfinkurnia 33 / 47  
Nov 14, 2016   #4
this is my correction for you.

He told that is practicing meditation is not about to make refresh our mind

... that meditation have manytremendous benefits to transform ...

... closed our eyes andclosed our breath for ...
Furthermore , people could add ...

thanks
yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Nov 15, 2016   #5
Hello, let me give my correction for you,

He told that practicing meditation iswas not about to make to refresh our mind.

to make to refresh "it has two verbs and no connector, so you must eliminate the one"

thank you


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