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There were several improvements in the region around lakeside especially for lake


Wilyaftika23 46 / 37 1  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
The changes in Lakeside in 2000 and 2009.

A breakdown of the changes in lakeside between 2000 and 2009 is revealed in the two diagrams. Overall, it can be seen that there were several improvements in the region around lakeside especially for lake while in 2009 lake was replaced with pond and building in the South of lakeside.

To begin with, there were two regions that was separated by river. Firstly, in 2009, there was no lake but it was changed by pond. Secondly, in 2000, in the south of lakeside there was industrial complex and behind this, there was residential area. But in 2009, these was replaced with the largest industrial complex while there were nine industrial building in there.

On the other hand, in the right region of lakeside, there were numerous improvements. Firstly, derelict ware house in the north of region was changed with car park in 2009. Meanwhile, Behind of this building, there were offices and university in one complex which this building replaced old town. On the front of residential area which this did not change, there was art center in 2000 and it changed with cinema in 2009. In addition, school building was unchanged but behind of this was built shopping center when in 2000 this place was location of residential area.


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SYDA 11 / 21 2  
Dec 1, 2016   #2
Hi...I read your writing; here is some correction to improve your writing.

~~~You have to write at least three sentence because it affect your score.

~~~ ... especially for lake, put a comma here while in 2009 ...

~~~ Firstly , unnecessary word in 2009, (...) it was changed byinto pond.

~~~Secondly , unnecessary word in 2000, in ...

Keep writing :)


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