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There are several steps to make a forest. Firstly, by spreading the seeds into the moist soil.


Gigih12 10 / 8  
Oct 17, 2016   #1
Hello, this is my resume about "How to grow a forest in your backyard" by Shubhendu Sharma-TED talk

Nowadays, forest not only use as a place for biodiversity, but also as the main place in this globalizations era. It does not matter the big or the small there are. Growing the forest in backyard of the house just need approximately 2 years. There are some benefits of forest, for example to produce the natural resources for vehicle. To make a forest, we should know the elements of it and try to group the elements. The main factor is soil and how to make water absorbed into it. We should make sure that the soil held the water and stay moist. If the soil do not have the nutrient, we must add it. On the other hand, soil has microorganism that could make the soil life and contained nutrient, because the task of microorganism is to eat and multiply.

Trees divide into 4 layers, there are canopy layer, tree layer, sub-tree layer, and shrub layer. The different between the canopy layer and tree layer is only in the size of the tree. Canopy layer located on the top of big trees and tree layer located on the top part of the medium-size trees. There are several steps to make a forest. Firstly, by spreading the seeds into the moist soil. Make sure there is a space between plants. After 3 month, the seeds grow into plants. The health of soil is known by the growth of mushrooms. Then, we must watering the plants daily until it reach approximately 2 years and try to remove the weed. AS the forest grow up, the sunlight can not reach the soil, and without the sunlight, weed disappear naturally. The forest no need to be watered again because the forest is moist enough and they can grow forever.

Qtraam 3 / 3  
Oct 17, 2016   #2
Hi Gigih,
I enjoy read your resume, I think it's really good. Just a few mistakes below.
1. After 3 month 3 months, the seeds grow into plants......
2. AS the forest grow up,(...), weed disappear disappears naturally.......
3. ... and they can grow forever. I think "durable" or " sustainable" is better meaning.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Oct 19, 2016   #3
HI Gigih, here's another one from my end.

- Nowadays,the ( don't forget your linking verbs ) forest is not only
- used as a place for biodiversity,
- but also as the main placesource of food in this globalizations era.
- It does not matter the big or the small there are. - I believe this sentence is not necessary

-Growing the forest in our backyard of the house just need approximately 2 years.
- There are some benefits ofin growing a forest,
- for example tothey produce the natural resources for vehicle .
- The main factor is soil and how to make sure that the water absorbed into it.
- we mustshould add some to it.

- On the other hand, the soil has microorganism that
- could make the soilgive life and
- contained nutrients ,
- because the task of the microorganism

There you have it Gigih, as you can see, there's still a lot more to do and enhance your essay and I hope you follow through with the corrections.

I left the last paragraph so you can practice editing yourself.


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