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Several Ways Technology stops crime againts enadangered animals


mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 19, 2016   #1
Wildlife, as natural habitat of endangered animals need to be conserved by human. Incline of hunting and the illicting trading animal suc as Rhinos, Elephants, and sharks toward extinction need to be reduced. The criminal networking are getting more sophasticated than even before. So, cutting-edge technology approaches should be developed for conserving and identifying them. Wild crime should be prevented with particular technology, here are 5 of 11 the most promising leading-edge technology tool for detecting wildlife crime, nabbing poachers, and stepping up law enforcement.

1.DNA Analysis
DNA analysis is the one of wildlife crime investigation. Samuel Wasser, DNA analisys of ivory compared with DNA-based mapping of elephant populations and focus in high-risk area.

2. Acoustic Traps
Using sensor which act using network of recycling cell phones with solar panels and antennas. When there were an illegal activity, such as plane or truck engines, chainsaws, explotions, and gunfire will be recorded and tranmitted sound into the phones.

3. Thermal imaging
The researchers are trying to check up the thermal imagery cameras to remote illegal activity into parks and conservation areas.
4. Spatial monitoring and reporting tool (SMART) and CyberTracker
This technology has uesd in 120 protective areas in 27 countries, the data are integrated from ranger patrols and will be analyzed if there were a local proachers.

RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 19, 2016   #2
... as A natural habitat of endangered animals needS to be conserved by human

an i ncline of hunting activity and the illicting illegal trading for suchasanimals near to extinct animals, like Rhinos, Elephants, and sharks,toward extinction need to be reduced.

So, cutting-edge technology approaches ...

therefore, cutting-edge technological approaches should be developed in order to identify and conserve them.

here are 5 of 11 the most promising leading-edge technology

in summarizing, you still need to mention all eleven approaches here. besides, you can't make a new idea or delivering your opinion that plausibly will interfere the ideas/works of the author or the source. in here, you can't conclude that those five methods that you wrote are greater or outweigh the others.

DNA analysis is the one of the wildlife crime investigation scenarios . Samuel Wasser, a DNAanalisysanalist , ......

.... etc.

you still need to focus on your sentence structure and basic grammar rules like article using and plural/singular issue. in addition, try harder in paraphrasing since i still find some similarities between the source words and yours. keep writing
andika08 81 / 80 16  
Sep 19, 2016   #3
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections

... the illicting trading animal suc as which are Rhinos, Elephants...
So Thus, cutting-edge technology approaches ...

When there were an illegal activity, such as which are plane (...) and gunfire. It will be recorded and transmitted sound ...

You can change like so with thus and therefore.
You can added preface before explain the several parts.
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Sep 19, 2016   #4
Hi, you may consider the following revision:

- Wildlife, as the natural habitat of endangered animals, need to be conserved by human.
- ... and the illicting trading animal suc h as...
- SoConsequentially , cutting-edge technology approaches ...
- ... with particular technology,.(full stop here) Here are 5 of 11 the...
- DNA analysis is the one of the wildlife crime investigation.
- Samuel Wasser, DNA analisyst ...
- Using sensor which act usingas a network ofin recycling cell phones...
- ...and gunfire will be recorded and transmitted sound...
- This technology has uesdbeen used in 120 protective(do you mean "protected"?) areas in 27 countries,.(full stop)

Hope this help!


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