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Should sharing knowledge about scientific research, business and the academic world be allowed?


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Feb 15, 2021   #1
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Should scientific research, business and the academic world be shared freely or not?



It is certain that sharing knowledge about scientific research, business and the academic world could be beneficial to the development of the world. However, I don't think we should share all information freely, especially some important or valuable one.

On the one hand, we are all living in a world with a ton of explorations and transformations on a daily basis. People in different countries are constantly in the process of seeking for new ideas to invent more creative and effective applications, for the sake of both individual and general purposes. Because we are all human beings, we should share useful information with others to contribute to the whole community. That will definitely do wonders by making people live more happily and conveniently. Moreover, the person who shared that knowledge will receive the society's recognition and gratitude for his efforts. For example, when someone can find a way to cure a dangerous disease, he can save the life of so many people and make a significant contribution to the world.

On the other hand, it is not worth sharing the important or valuable information without receiving anything. I suppose that we had better pay an equivalent price for that as the inventors or researchers- the ones who create the new inventions had to put on so many efforts including their time and money. Therefore, if they could not gain anything back, it would absolutely be unfair to them. Moreover, others who are brilliant and talented may gradually lose their interest and motivation in making any contribution for the society.

In conclusion, although sharing knowledge is a great way to boost the development of the world in all fields such as economics, science, medical,...people should pay a proper price for what they want to obtain from others.

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Feb 16, 2021   #2
You have turned a 5 paragraph comparison essay into a 4 paragraph personal opinion essay. The format for your response is incorrect. You are to use 2 public comparison discussion paragraphs first, then present your personal opinion. While you did discuss both points of view, these were done using the personal opinion method. Since this is not an agree or disagree essay, you should not use that format for this presentation. Always review the prompt for discussion instructions. Don't just assume that it is a personal opinion and agree/disagree essay. Familiarize yourself with the various discussion requirements for the task 2 essays. There are several that you have to learn about. You have shown that you have a misunderstanding of the response format so you should focus on that problem before anything else. If you cannot discuss the essay in the correct format, then your overall score will definitely suffer.


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