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Sharuk Khan! He is my favorite hero.


megha 7 / 13  
Mar 8, 2010   #1
If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that
be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your
choice
Entertainment is such a powerful medium because of which the person in any condition can manage to be happy for a while.
During watching movies, he forget every worries, he is facing in his stressful life. Entertainer has very difficult job to make people get involve with them. May be that may be in forms of singing, comedy and acting. If I would get an opportunity to meet famous personality then I would like to meet sharuk khan.

Firstly, I like to began with saying I like to meet him because he is my favorite hero. Since I have born, I have grown up with watching his movie. He is dedicated person who devotes whole time for his work and family. He is one of the famous personalities from India and the richest person still he has strong incentive to work whole day and night.

Secondly, he is a good person by nature. He respect all human may be rich or poor. He started this carrier in very early age. When he came to mumbai he has no relatives, no friend there. He has to stay on foot path for 1year. After striving hard he got job in acting in tv serial called "Circus" his acting carrier stared from here. He got recognized from his work in "Circus. He had no god father with him who would had promote him. He worked very, very hard and got such name and fame. He has worked in thousand of films which had owe him many award for his acting in it.

To sum up with, I like to meet sharuk khan because he is hard working, determinant, good actor and good human being by nature.

RabiaG 1 / 30  
Mar 8, 2010   #2
You are repeating "he" WAYYYY to muchh!

Don't make this paragraph, a list it becomes redundant and not engaging to the reader.

Explain Sharukh Khan and the way he acts, make it very interesting in which the reader can imagine what you might be saying especially for those who have no idea of "bollywood".

In addition, what engages you about sharukh when he acts or when he does all those things.

You mentioned his fame and riches? Is that why you like him?

be clear.

Hope, that helps.

GOOD LUCK!
OP megha 7 / 13  
Mar 9, 2010   #3
Thank you.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 9, 2010   #4
Entertainment is such a powerful medium because of which a person in any condition can manage to be happy for a while. --- this is a nice sentence!!

You can write "every worry" or "all worries" but not "every worries"
During While watching movies, he forgets every worry he is facing in his stressful life. Entertainer has very difficult job to make people get involve with them.

That may be in forms of singing, comedy and acting.

If I would get an opportunity to meet a famous personality then I would like...

Now capitalize his name:
... to meet Sharuk Khan.

He is one of the famous personalities from India and the richest person; still, he has strong incentive to work whole day and night.

Secondly, he is a good person by nature, someone who respects all human regardless of whether someone is rich or poor.

To sum up with, I like to meet sharuk khan because he is a hard working, determinant, good actor and good human being by nature.

:-)
OP megha 7 / 13  
Mar 10, 2010   #5
how much marks you can grade me for this essay?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 11, 2010   #6
Sorry!! I can't give an accurate grade, because I don't know how these are scored.

But if it's up to me, I give you an A!!
:-D


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