Start your intro with a catchy hook and also in thesis, include your subtopics.
Be careful about spelling even if it is a typing mistake.
Besides, these are some grammar mistakes I found.
Firstly, In the globalized world, mass consumption is a major message which mass media conveys to people from all walks of life.
Media adverisments are constanly trying to prove that more consumption is an undeniable sign of prest igious person in the modern era as well as tempting indidviduals to buy newly-produced goods and materials as much as possible.
It means that they are more exposed to frequent occuring advertismentsoccuring to encouregeing people buying new stuffs.
This innate force is stronger among youth group and it pushes them to buy and consume goods.