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Shopping's responses of society in the capital city of Auckland


hasbi 29 / 42 23  
Oct 6, 2015   #1
The table and pie chart illustrate the proportion of new shopping's responses of society in the capital city of Auckland based on result of research. Overall, it can be see that females experience very satisfied in shops and restaurant rather than males. in another case, both of them is predominantly feel satisfied in design sector.

The percentage of males who feel very satisfied in shops at around 17 %. Compare with females that depict twice of males proportion. While mainly of men satisfied and abstained than female in this side, both indicate an equal dissatisfied percentage at 20 %.In restaurants field, although they have similar number on very satisfied and no comment, men reveal a huge number of satisfied than female at 55% and 35 respectively. Moreover, women refer fourfold dissatisfied of the percentage of men.

turning to design, both of sexes think satisfied is 62 % and 17 % very satisfied of total proportion. These figures feel 11 % on dissatisfied; likewise, no comment reaction 10 %




Alif Biswas 3 / 5 4  
Oct 6, 2015   #2
You can add something about the difference of male and female psychology instead of using numeric data.
akiraaa 7 / 20 2  
Oct 7, 2015   #3
Overall, it can be see that females experience very satisfied in shops and restaurant rather than males.
- Overall, it can be see that females feel more satisfied in shops and restaurants rather than males.

turning to design, both of sexes think satisfied are 62 % and 17 % very satisfied of total proportion.

I think there maybe some disorders in your grammar, making me hard to follow your essay.
Perhaps you can add the reason and examples of the difference.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Oct 8, 2015   #4
Some changes in para 1
- The table compares how shoppers classified by genders render their values to both shops and restaurants, while the pie chart shows the proportion of people's values by design.

- In any case, the highest percentage of both males and females feeling satisfied was noted in design sector

Some changes in para 2

The percentage of males who feel [...]

- The percentage of males who feel very satisfied in shops is at around 17 %, compared with the figure for females showing twice as much as that of males. This proportion has no differences in the number of females and males giving no comments.

- A gap between males and females being satisfied narrows down, while there seem to be 20% of females and males being dissatisfied.


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