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Silkworms experience their life in five stages and spend about 10 weeks from eggs to become moths


fahmisadja 33 / 33 34  
Nov 5, 2015   #1
Life cycle of the silkworm is illustrated by the diagram and picture. At first glance, it is evident that, silkworms experience their life in five stages and spend approximately 10 weeks from eggs to become moths.

First step, the eggs are spawned and adhered by their mother on leaves. After 10 days, the eggs hatch and transform to be silkworm larva. To survive their life, larvas eat mulberry leaf, their favorite diet. During four to six weeks, enough long time, they are going to grow up and produce silk thread. Eventually in that phase, larvas insert its self to coil of silk to make cocoon in three to eight days. While larva is inside, it does not look for and consume food or drink. Afterwards, silkworm comes out from cocoon with new appearance in 16 days. In the end of stages, it becomes a moth with wings and has a skill to fly. The figure of moth is totally different with silkworm, people call it metamorphose.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 5, 2015   #2
Masdar, your essay is acceptable and delivers an interesting report for the reader. However, since your paragraphs do not adhere to the correct formatting for these essays, you could be facing points deductions in the actual test once you take it. Tell you what I'll do. I'll take the time to correct your essay grammar and also show you how can make your future essays meet the sentence and paragraph requirements as well. I hope it can help you out :-)

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L THE life cycle of the silkworm is illustrated by the ATTACHED diagram and picture. At first glance, it is evident that, silkworms experience their life in five stages. DURING THESE STAGES, IT WILL TAKE and spend approximately 10 weeks from FOR THE eggs to become moths.

First step AT THE BEGINNING, the eggs are spawned and adhered by their mother on TO THE leaves. After 10 days, the eggs hatch and transform to be DEVELOP INTO silkworm larva. To survive their life , larvas LARVAE (PLURAL FORM) eat mulberry leaf LEAVES 9PLURAL FORM), their favorite diet.

During THE NEXT four to six weeks, enough long time, they THESE LARVAE WILL are going to grow up and produce silk threadS. Eventually in IN that phase, larvas LARVAE insert its self ITSELF INto THE coil of silk to make cocoon , CREATING A COCOON in three to eight days. While larva is inside, it does not look for and consume food or drink.

Afterwards, THE silkworm comes BREAKS OUT out from THE cocoon with A new appearance in 16 days. In the end of stages AT THE END OF THE STAGES, it becomes a moth with wings and has a skill to CAN fly. The figure of moth is totally different with FROM THE silkworm, people call it metamorphose A METAMORPHOSIS.

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As you can see, creating the right number of paragraphs and sentences per paragraph is sometimes just a matter of knowing how to divide the topic sentences into related or grouped discussions.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Nov 5, 2015   #3
Life cycle of the silkworm is illustrated by the diagram and picture. At first glance, it is evident that, silkworms experience their life in five stages and spend approximately 10 weeks from eggs to become moths.

This is good. Yet, the sentences presented are too short. You need at least three sentences in a paragraph.
A life cycle of a silkworm is broken down into four stages. Having started in eggs, such life cycle ends with cocoon and continues to grow into an adult moth over the following days. This diagram demonstrates the most advanced form of metamorphosis .


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