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Toefl essay on Silvio Berlusconi.


dar81 1 / 1  
Nov 18, 2009   #1
please rank this essay and provide me your advice!!

Thank you very much

Imagine that you can talk for one hour with any person who has lived at any time in history. Which person would you choose to meet?

Use specific details and examples to explain your choice.

I do not want to talk with a person who lived in the past.
This is why, out of this essay, I am going to choose one person that is still alive.
His name is Silvio Berlusconi.
He is the prime minister of the Italian republic.
As all of the people in the world know, he is also one of the richer man in the world, he also have al lot of conflicts.

The biggest one is the so called "conflicts of different interests". Berlusconi is also the manager of the most information companies in Italy, and also the manager of banks, football teams and so on.

Personally a think everything except honest and intelligent but he is just a man who become the richest one in Italy due to his relationships with Mafia and his attitude to make business without having any form of respect for other people.

Most of the people in Italy think that he is in politics just to avoid his problems with justice, and I totally agree with this opinion.

If I had the possibility to meet him I just would like to question?
What do you think the history will say about you in 20 years?, for sure you will be considered at the same level of Mussolini, are you not ashamed for this?

Do you understand that since you took the power, Italy is going to be a republic of bananas?
What does your daughter think about your love story with teen girls?
Do you think that a father of Italy can deliver these messages to the nation?
But I know what will be the answer, the answer that only a stupid man can provide.
I hope this is the last time that Italy have to tolerate this.
In Italy there are a mass media dictatorship this is the only truth!

Poojasugandhi 18 / 35  
Nov 18, 2009   #2
Hi,

1. Your essay if out of the topic. You can not write I dint want to talk with a person who lived in past. That's your essay topic. You have to write about it.
OP dar81 1 / 1  
Nov 18, 2009   #3
yes I know but I just want to exercise my writing, right know I don't care about going out of the topic
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Nov 20, 2009   #4
I just want to exercise my writing

Yes, I know what you mean!! You are great, I'm inspired by bilingual people.

You wrote know instead of now. Be careful of that!

right now I don't care about

As all of the people in the world know, he is also one of the richest people in the world...

You should always use "people" instead of men; it's a way of trying to be gender-inclusive.

If I had the opportunity to meet him I just would like to ask a question.
What do you think the history will say about you in 20 years? For s ure you will be considered at the same level of Mussolini, are you not...


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