EF_Simone 2 / 1,986 Jul 18, 2009 #41Hmmm... I think what your teacher is saying is that you substituted summarization for explanation. In other words, you said a lot but never really explained your thesis."Sounds too conversational" means that your language is not sufficiently formal. This may also refer to lack of organization or structure.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491 Jul 18, 2009 #42The last two are elements of style that you can fix fairly easily by good proofreading. The first one is more content related, though, and is closer to what I was talking about.
