newscientist.com/article/2090358-5-sleep-disorders-you-didnt-know-existed/
The article highlights information related to 5 uncommon sleep disorders. Shouted, and woken up and unable to move, for instance, are a few of symptoms that people usually deal with during slept. There are 5 cause of slept disorder that people are supposed to recognize. First is sleep apnoea which suddenly have not breathed for 10 seconds as primary symptom. The complicated effect is evidenced by loud snoring. The second cause is sleep paralysis which perform the body unexpected become paralysed during REM and is going to continue when people conscious. Sleep deprivation, some drugs, and sleep apnoea are the severe cause of sleep paralysis to become exacerbating. The third cause is Hypnagogic jerks indicated by jumping, twitching and often accompany by the sensation of falling. There are no researcher explication toward this symptom. Fourth, REM sleep disorder indicated by shouting or striking everything around in the night. People act this phenomenon only in their nightmare. Lastly, exploding head syndrome, people regard this condition is harmless yet people have no idea toward the cause. It indicated by sensation of noise and loud voice like gunshot or bomb explosion.
Dear Iforsa,
Shouted, and woken up and unable to .....theres a flaw in sentence framing and structure.
Hi Sofi, the detailed descriptions below are my analysis towards your essay. I hope you can follow through.
- There are 5 causeS of slept disorder that people are supposed to recognize.
- First, one of them is sleep apnoea in which a person will not breath suddenlyhave not breathed for about 10 seconds as primary symptom.
- The complicated effect is evidencedIt is indicated by the appearance of loud snoring.
- The second causeSecond, it is sleep paralysis in which it makes perform the body becomes unexpectedlybecome paralyzed during REM and is going to continue when people conscious.
- Sleep deprivation, some drugs, and sleep apnoea are the severe causeS of sleep paralysis to become exacerbating.(what do you mean by this information? It is quite confusing. I reckon that without them the sentence would be correct)
- Fourth, REM sleep disorder is indicated by shouting or striking ... (missing verb will make the sentence incomplete or inaccurate)
As you can see Sofi, I hope you can learn something from the above-mentioned corrections. Good luck for the next post :)
hi iforsa,,
Shouted, and woken up and unable to move, for instance,
There are 5 cause causes of slept disorder
The second cause is sleep
Sleep deprivation, some drugs, and sleep apnoea are the severe cause causes of sleep paralysis ...
The third cause is Hypnagogic
thank you:)
here i give suggestion by revising your sentences
please concern about subject+verb agreement and how to compose a good sentence that understandable for reader
start from the title: 5 sleep disorders you didn't know exiteddo/does/did should meet bare infinitive(verb 1)
The article highlights information related to 5 uncommon sleep disorders [need a conjuction here since you wrote two verbs].
Shouted, and woken up and unable to move, for instance, are ... = shouted, woken up, and unable to move, for instance, are a few symptoms that people usually deal with during sleep.
There are 5 causeS of slept disorder that people are supposed to recognize.
First][need comma] is sleep apnoea which suddenly ... = at the first/for the first/firstly/first of all, sleep apnoea as a condition in which people suddenly can't breath for 10 seconds is the primary symptom
The second cause is sleep paralysis which perform the body unexpected ... = the second cause is sleep paralysis when the body unexpectedly being paralyze during REM while this condition persists even in conscious state of people
Sleep deprivation, some drugs, and sleep apnoea are the severe causeS of sleep paralysis to become exacerbating. = sleep deprivation, drugs, and sleep apnoea are the severe causes which are exacerbating sleep paralysis
... indicated by jumping, twitching and often accompany [accompanies] by the sensation of falling.
People actundergo/encounter this phenomenon only in their nightmare.
Lastly, exploding head syndrome, people regard this condition ... = exploding head syndrome which is regarded as harmless condition by people while they have no idea toward its cause
It IS indicated by sensation of noise and ...
hi sofi
...that people usually deal with during slept . sleep
slept is a past participle while the sentence need a noun so, you should write sleep
Lastly the last, exploding head syndrome, people regard this condition is harmless it as a harmful condition
i suggest you to pay attention with the word form such as adjective, noun, verb and adverb
hi iforsa ;)
these are my correction for your essay.
unexpected become paralyz ed
There areis no researcher
causes of sleep paralysis
The second cause is sleep
thankyouuu ;)
