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A small country with big ideas - Costarica


Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 28, 2016   #1
Costarica is one developing country which located at right in the middle of Americas. It country have nearly five million people. Actually they had fossil fuel, but this resource not generated for their electrity because it focusly to supply their electricity transportation system for next period. So that their can power their cars, buses, and trains. In the future, in 2022, this country are already trying electric buses and cars that can save money and reduce pollution. On the other hand, surprisingly this country had other alternative energy resources that fulled by 70 per cent of electricity. It found from five renewable resources: hydropower, geothermal, wind, solar, and biomass. This energy comes from water in their rivers, heat from volcanoes, wind turbines, solar panels, and biowaste. There are 3 reasons why Costarica make and choose this plan, but the major reason is "the world is hungry of new inspiration".

andika_soppeng - / 16 2  
Sep 28, 2016   #2
hi

Alamsyah Ismail

you write very well. However, there are several significant points which you should pay more attention.

Costarica Costa Rica is one OF developing country Countries ( not only Costa Rica is developing countries, but many other countries also)which located at right ...

It THIS country have nearly five million people INHABITANT. Actually , (PUT COMMA HERE) they THIS COUNTRY had fossil fuel, but this resource IS not generated for their electrity ELECTRYCITY because it focusly to FOCUSES ON supply their electricity ...

So , (PUT COMMA HERE) thattheir IT can power their cars...
... in 2022, this country are already tryingWILL ATTEMPT TO GENERATE electric buses and cars ...
On the other hand, surprisingly , (PUT COMMA HERE) this country had ...
There are 3 reasons why Costarica Costa Rica make MAKES and choose CHOOSES this plan, but the major ...

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ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Sep 28, 2016   #3
hai andika
I have several suggestions for you

Costarica is one of the] developing country (...) in the middle of Americas . ItThis country have nearly five millions people.

Actually, they had fossil fuel, (...) generated for their electrityelectricity because it focusly to ...

So that their can power for their cars, buses, and trains.

It found from five renewable resources consist o f hydropower, geothermal, ...

This energy comes from water in their rivers, heat from volcanoes, wind ...

thank you
David54 15 / 22 1  
Sep 29, 2016   #4
Hallo bro,

There are several correction for you,

Costarica is one of developing country which ...
..It country have nearly five million people.
... but this resource did not generatedelectrical power for themfor their electrity because they focusit focusly to supply thetheir electricity transportation ...
..So that their they can produce power to their cars, ...
Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Sep 29, 2016   #5
Hi Alam,after reading your summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps useful for you.
1. Costarica is one of the developing countries which located at right side in the middle of Americas.
2. wrong spelling word
electrity ----> electricity
3. It country have nearly five million people. ----> This country have nearly five million citizens
4.So that their can power their cars, buses, and trains. ------> So they can produce power for their cars, buses, and trains.
rizaldohabibie 19 / 35  
Sep 29, 2016   #6
hi..
I have some points in your essay..

It[this] country have[has] nearly five million people. Actually they[it]had[has] fossil fuel, but this resource [is] not generated fo

I hope it helps..


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