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Smoking is Littering - this habit should be limited in public areas. IELTS Taks 2


ANSOR99 10 / 6 3  
Apr 2, 2016   #1
1. Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer:


It has become debatable for smoking case in the public areas and almost the great number of people believe that tobacco is the dangerous substance for human's body. For this case, i strongly agree that smoking is not allowed in the crowded places such mall, school, and station because of distructing health and littering.

The rule of banning to smoke in the society can cause the drawback in the community like less profit for shop until closing down the business. If the dwellers are forbidden to light up their tobacco in public region, it will lead them to stay away from the crowd. For example, when the smokers want to smoke, they try to stay away from the crowd. It means that the shoppers in the centre of entertaining locations such as recreation places will experience a gradual decrease of the customers. Consequently, the owners of business have less income and even they think of setting of the stores.

The habit of consuming the cigarette makes some problems for smokers itself and environment. Firstly, smoking will distruct the health. This case has been hot issue which is frequently discussed in every meeting in the social forum that tobacco can induce many deseases like lung cancer, tuberculosis, and impotent. For instance, in Indonesia, many adult people are risks to get deseas easily because they have smoked since teenagers. Secondly, littering. It is common for the smoking people who suck up their tobacco in the public locations throw the cigarette butts or the packs in every where. For instance, the youngsters who get in touch with their group in some places, it can be ensured that they have a smoke and the areas will be mess and dirty because of cigarette ash and packages.

In conclusion, smoking habit can bring some negative impact for smokers and environment so that the use of it in the public areas should be limited. Therefore, i have the recommendations for the cigarette suckers that they have to respect other people and keep clean the environment.
fardan10 18 / 25 1  
Apr 2, 2016   #2
It has become debatable for smoking case in the public ...

Excuse me sir, this is my suggestion for the introduction:
Smoking is a harmful activity for public health. As such, both active and passive smoker could be affected by this behaviour. Some argue that public spaces should be protected from smokers by policy, although tax income from cigarette industry has contributed to the public bugdet. I firmly agree that health rate of society will be declined due to the smoking activity in the crowded places.

Note:
(in my perspective It is better for explaining both agree and disagree view and you can explain in the first and second BODY before emphasize your idea to agree or disagree the statement)
behieli 7 / 19 4  
Apr 2, 2016   #3
the essay is good, though you should pay more attention to the grammatical structure and the flow of the words. I'll mention some sentences I noticed which, with more attention will improve your essay.

It has become debatable for smoking case in the public ...........there is a debate over smoking in public and an increasing number of people are of the belief that smoking has harmful effects on human body.

The habit of consuming the cigarette makes some problems ..........The habit of smoking makes problems for smokers as well as the environment.

in Indonesia, many adult people are risks to get deseas ... .....in Indonesia many adults risk their health every year simply as the result of (or because of) smoking in their youth.

smoking habit can bring some negative impact for......the habit of smoking can impact on......harmfully (or has harmful impact on)

And try to arrange your reasons by numbering themin your mind:
1-the first reason why you agree with banning smoking in public
2-the second reason
3-....
it will help you focus on the flow of your sentences.

hope my suggestions help.


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