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Being social makes us happier, healthier and we live longer than people who are less connected.


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Sep 23, 2016   #1
What makes a good life? Lessons from the longest study on happiness

Life is too short sometime we climb from bottom to the top, sometime turning opposite direction. Life teach about relationship so keep happier and healthier. Robert Waldinger by his big lesson talked about relationships which social connection. Social connection to communities, to friends are happier, healthier and they live longer than people who was less connected.

Based on his research, more happily man or women even their physical pain but their mood just still happy. However the people who unhappy relationship reported their physical pain by more emotional pain. This explanation good for us that is relationship good in health.

To sum up human need connected each other. It is practical endless. A good life is build good relationship, he ended his speech.

source: youtube.com/watch?v=8KkKuTCFvzI

sinahector 7 / 34  
Sep 23, 2016   #2
Hi
your essay is good. But there are some points that considering them could be beneficial
Life is too short, sometime
climb from the bottom to the top
Life teachs
relationships which means??? social connection
Social connection to communities, to friends =by connecting to communities or friends, we are..
who are less connected.
connected=connection

I am trying to write better essays by reading samples. I suggest that you do the same.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Sep 23, 2016   #3
Hi Patta, the summary essay is missing a few punctuations marks (e.g., comma) as well as linking verbs in order to complete the thought of the sentence.

Please find additional suggested modifications below.

- Life is too short, sometimes we climb
- from bottom to the top,
- sometimes turning to the opposite direction.
- Life teach us about relationships
- sothey keep us happier and healthier.
- Robert Waldinger bywith his big lesson
- talked about relationships whichwith social connections .
- than people who wasare less connected.

- Based on his research,
- more happilywhen a man or woma n
- is happy, even their physical pain but their mood just still happygoes away .
- However,the people who are in an unhappy - their physical pain by morethat emotional pain is more painful .
- This explanation is good for us that is relationship good in healthto maintain a healthy relationship .

- To sum up humans needs to be connected to each other.
- It is practical endless. A good life is buildbuilt in a good relationship, he ended his speech.

There you have it Patta, I hope the above corrections help in your revision.
Your summary is somehow a direct translation of your understanding which is good, however, it is also translated in a way that you understand it in your mother tongue and not in the English language, so a little more practice is needed.


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