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monajha 5 / 8  
Sep 13, 2012   #1
Twenty first century is the world of 'Internet'. We get connected to our buddies through internet. Social Networking Site has helped us to connect to our relatives, friends, colleagues, and strangers, sitting far away from us. We get to know about the people, their interests, their work etc. through these sites. These sites have become very common among individuals of all age. Today there are many SNSs that have influenced modern human lives in many aspects. These sites have their own pros and cons.

First SNS was SixDegrees.com which was launched in 1997. Some most commonly SNSs used today are: Facebook, Google plus, Twitter, Flickr, Bebo, MySpace, Meetup, Meetme, Orkut, etc. Users create their profiles, add interests, add photographs, add friends, etc. Here friends can be relatives, colleagues, or even strangers. Friends can be added from anywhere in the world.

SNSs have become common among children, teenage, adults, and also among old people. It is a very common pastime and also the most convinent means to connect to the people, whom we can't meet or connect through phone. We can also video chat, voice chat, or do video conferencing with the friends added in our friend's list. This is the most important feature provided by such sites. Even jobs can be searched on these sites; Linkedin is the professional networking site of one such type. There are SNSs for dogs and cats also, Dogster and Catster respectively. Their profiles are managed by their owners.

SNSs sites are extensively used by youth; not only by college and school going kids but also people working in office. It kills valuable time, intended for productive work. These sites are blocked in several offices and also schools and colleges, but there are various proxy servers which can be used to access these sites. These sites are also involved in Cyber Crime.

Technology has their own advantages and disadvantages. Thus, these sites are again the gift of Science & Technology if used with great care.
nikhi 1 / 2  
Sep 15, 2012   #2
Some thoughts:

- Try not to use 'also' so much (synonyms: too, as well, in addition, additionally, along with, besides). Often the 'also' isn't necessary at all.

- If you use a semicolon (;) make sure there is a subject and a verb for each side of the semicolon (each side must be a complete sentence).

- Numbers (and ordinal numbers), which are expressed in two words, need to be hyphenated (e.g., twenty-first, twenty-one, thirty-three) unless the number is one hundred or larger (e.g., one hundred twenty-one, six hundred thirty, one hundred five).

- Be careful what you capitalize (when in doubt, look it up).

- In general, place commas where you would naturally pause for breath if you were reading your essay aloud.

- You began your essay using the present tense, so try to keep everything in the present tense, unless it is necessary to clarify that something happened in the past or will happen in the future.

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