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Social networking is an usefull thing if you use it in the right way.

Emyviadolorosa 1 / 3  
Oct 5, 2017   #1

the impact of social networking

In my opinion, social nextworking have both good and bad.It depend on your frequency. Social media is a place that you connect to other friends easily.. But it is not really good. someone can abuse to do bad things. It can help you for work, learning,seaching,but it lack of pricacy. Every one know your account,your picture, .Next,the damage of social netwwork give is isomnia,when you extremly concentrate on it,and don't want to put it don't. Social network can make conversasion between you and others, cause you can see them,talk to them through social media, with that, you never want to meet them in real life. Relationship on Internet on internet have both bad and good. The advantage of this is you can connect with new friend, chatting with friend and family. Besides social netwworking can be dangerous, strenger can bunco your money, your crebility. Social networking will usefull if you use it in a right way.

Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Oct 5, 2017   #2
Song, what is the prompt that you are responding to? Were you asked to just write a statement instead of a full essay? The reason that I ask is because this statement is horribly written. It doesn't follow the proper spacing rules between sentences, you have misplaced punctuation points in some instance, and you are presenting ideas for discussion without really discussing these topics. You are just throwing these information in there without actual explanations.

Now, if you were asked to just write a statement, then my previously stated observations are enough to get you started in a revision. However, if you were supposed to write a full length, 5 paragraph essay, then you have a lot of work to do before you get there. You can get started with developing the topic sentences into individual paragraphs, making sure to thoroughly explain your point of view in each and then creating a proper concluding statement.

At this point, I am not really sure as to how to judge your statement because of the lack of instructions coming from you. If you decide to participate in this forum again, just for practice, please don't forget to give us instructions for the assessment of your work. Thanks.
Chichi9 4 / 3  
Oct 5, 2017   #3
social nextworking networking.
In my opinion, social nextworking have both good and bad. . Good and bad what?
Overall, your essay is filled with so many grammatical and spelling errors which makes it quite difficult to comprehend.
Finally just a Holt said try to state the specific prompt requirements next time. Hope this helps.
OP Emyviadolorosa 1 / 3  
Oct 6, 2017   #4
thank you for your helping, that is my student's writting, and i don't know how to correct it ^^
OP Emyviadolorosa 1 / 3  
Oct 6, 2017   #5
@Holt ,Thank you for your concern.. I am not very good at writting. And it it difficult for me to correct it. Thank you

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