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Many social-related problems being rushed up if somebody's speaking is ignored by listeners


Ifan21 22 / 24 2  
Sep 28, 2016   #1
Summary of TED how speak so that people want to listen (julian Treasure)

Many social-related problem being rushing up if somebody speaking is ignored by college whom they speak to. They sometimes become frustrate because of no any respond, evenmore for several number of people are squeezed by they sorrounding out. Based on Julian Tresure, the chair of the Sound Agency, some factors can trigger by their self including gosip, judging, negativity, complaining, excuses, lying and dogmatism. Those self problems can be solved by transforming personality into HAIL (Honest, authenticity, integrity and love). and forthermore, by organizing or maintaining your speak whether you want to conditionate the atmosphere of your voice such as, volume, rhyme, empisize and nuance.

Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 28, 2016   #2
Hello Ifan21
I have advice to you, attract your attention if you wish

Many social-related problem(s) being rushing up
.....because there is determiner word (many), so you should write problem with s

They sometimes become frustrate because
....Sometime, they become frustrate because ----->maybe more better when the stucture of sentence like that
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 28, 2016   #3
Many social-related problemS being rushing RUSHED up if somebody'S speaking is ignored ... [ be careful on singular/plural issue, word form chosen and subject+verb agreement. those seems simple but really affect the quality of your work]

They sometimes become frustrateD because of no any respond, evenmore for several number of several people are even squeezed by theyTHEIRsorroundingout.SURROUNDING

concern on the sense or function of your sentence

..., some factors can triggerBE TRIGGERED by their selfTHEMSELVES including gosip, judging, negativity?, complaining, excuses,...

... transforming personality into HAIL (Honest, authenticity, integrity and love). and forthermore , by organizing or maintaining your speakING/SPEECH whether you want to conditionate the atmosphere of your voice such as, volume, rhyme, empisize and nuance.

misspelling is also your habitual flaw
good luck
Iedha01 21 / 40  
Sep 28, 2016   #4
Hello Ifan,
Your summary is good, however, let me give you some inputs based on what I have noticed.

Those SELF PROBLEM can be solved by transforming.....

- at the first sentence you wrote GOSIP, JUDJING,NEGATIVELY,COMPLAINING,...
and I think SELF PROBLEM is not the appropriate word there, you should use " negative attitude" or "bad Habit"


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