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IELTS WT2 - Socialising online or in person



GwenVu 1 / -  
Feb 7, 2025   #1
Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


In accordance to studies, teenagers tend to prefer socialising online to face-to-face meetings. This phenomenon can be explained by several reasons and addressed by some implementable measures.

The increasing popularity of meeting online is the consequence of 2 key factors, including objective and subjective factors. In terms of objective reason, social networking platforms are becoming more accessible, convenient and user-friendly. These platforms are designed so that anyone, regardless of their ages and regions, can easily use to communicate with people online. Users can socialize online with no effort and no cost by just clicking on an icon on their phone screens, making meeting online easier, time-saving and less costly. On the other hand, the subjective reason is that teenagers' behavior has changed since the Covid-19 pandemic. During the pandemic, online meeting was the only mean of communication of teenagers, such as learning and meeting with friends. Therefore, teenagers found it more familiar to meet online than meeting in person.

Several measures can be implemented to encourage teenagers to spend more time for face-to-face meetings. Firstly, parents and teachers play an important role in reducing time that teenagers spending online. In specific, parents could limit the time that their children can use phones at home and encourage them to get involved in real-life bonding activities with family and friends. For teachers, they can prohibit phones in class and promote students to participate in extra curricula to reduce the time for social media. Secondly, education is cruicial. Teenagers should be taught about the potential downsides of socializing online such as cyber bullying, scams, bad physical health and social skills.

In summary, the preference of online meeting over in-person meeting among teenagers can be explained by both objective and subjective rationales, and it is possible to address this with the hands of parents, teachers and society,
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15593  
Feb 8, 2025   #2
The prompt restatement is too simplistic and does not fulfill the sentence requirement and response representation that is required for the paragraph. While the topic representation is acceptable as a one sentence rewording, the lack of proper summary responses to the 2 provided guid questions prevented the paragraph from meeting the 3 - 5 sentence requirement. No points will be awarded for the preliminary writer's opinion part of the TA because the questions were merely restated in opinion form instead of providing a summarized response to each question. This is where the essay will score the lowest possible score. The preliminary TA score is not going to help ensure a passing final score.

The increasing popularity of meeting online is the consequence of 2 key factors, including objective and subjective factors.

This is the summarized cause representation that should have been in the first paragraph

The concluding summary will also not help the essay get an increased positive score because it does not meet the 40 word or 2 sentence requirement. This paragraph will not receive a passing preliminary score either. Therefore it is questionable if this essay will receive a final passing in an actual test.
clauana 4 / 13  
Feb 10, 2025   #3
Hii Gwen,

I feel like your first paragraph lacks a real sense. It's too short and vague without any real introduction to the topic. Additionally, it ends without an effective connecting sentence to the next paragraph. Personally, I found the transition abrupt.

These platforms are designed so that anyone, regardless of their ages and regions, can easily use to communicate with people online.

In the second paragraph, there's too much information about how the platforms work, which, to me, diverges a bit from the original focus.
Overall, presenting only two reasons to justify the preference for online communication, without even mentioning other possibilities, seems weak argumentatively, especially since in the opening lines you mentioned that there were several reasons for this preference.
I suggest you to think again on the topic and rearrange your essay.


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