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Society advances most when people break from the traditions of their predecessors.


Pepsicub 1 / -  
Jan 29, 2014   #1
Today the most important process in the world is globalization . Cultural differences are erased , and the world is gradually becoming one big state. The only thing that can still maintain the cultural identity of a community is its tradition. But do not become a barrier to the traditions of the cultural association of people ? Perhaps they should be broken ?

I completely disagree with this view .
First, everything that has ever been created in a community all cultural, spiritual and material values ​​, based on the traditions of this group of people. Without these traditions completely lost an opportunity to make something unique . The state will lose interest not only for all the people , but also for its residents.

Secondly , cultural identity must be present in the mind of every person , otherwise he will lose himself, his worldview. People will become gray mass that nothing in itself is not . Society can not develop under such conditions and likely mankind will die .

Third, we must honor our ancestors, PS all that they did for us . We have no right to break that create it for centuries . Formation of traditions is a process that creates a unique image of the state . Everyone, whatever it was , must honor their traditions and their cultural identity . And to complement and continue them. Just as we honor our ancestors.

In conclusion , we can say that if all the traditions and the images disappeared , humanity would have turned into a gray mass , not having any values ​​or benchmarks .

So I think that traditions only help society to develop while maintaining the identity of each group.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 29, 2014   #2
The only thing that can still help maintain the cultural identity of a community is its tradition.traditions.

But do not become a barrier to the traditions of the cultural association of people ?

.... This question is not clear to me. I think you should rephrase this line :(
First, everything that has ever been created in a community all cultural, spiritual and material values ​​, is based on the traditions of this group of people.

What group of people? You tend to make very complicated sentences for very simple ideas. That's not a very good way. Clarity comes before everything else and you need to present your ideas more clearly to the reader :(
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Feb 9, 2014   #3
First, everything that has ever been created in a community all cultural, spiritual and material values ​​, based on the traditions of this group of people. Without these traditions completely lost an opportunity to make something unique . The state will lose interest not only for all the people , but also for its residents.

There is no specific example to back your justification.
You need to pay attention to the structure of your essay (I guess this is for practicing for IELTS or TOEFL)


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