In this modern century where every individual is democratic to live their life in own style but sometimes his living creates problem for other person then he had to face laws and rules created by society .
This is a perfect example of what I wrote about a previous essay of yours: You are writing long sentences into which errors inevitably creep. I am sorry to have to say this so bluntly, but your English skills are simply not sufficient to allow you to write at that level of complexity. You must write short, simple, error-free sentences if you want to have any chance at all of passing the IELTS. What, exactly, are you saying here? I can't rewrite it for you, because I can't figure out what you are trying to say.
Let me try rewriting another sentence:
Secondly every people have their own mind and thinking , sometime for fun he start beating other people to show he had so much power and courage so that time these laws help other people to get compensation or the person get punished by society.
Rewrite:
Secondly
,all people have their own mind
s and
ways of thinking
.S ometime
s, for fun
,a person might start beating other people to show
that he ha
s so much power and courage
.so that time theseIn that insance, laws help other people to get compensation
for their injuries.or the person get punished by society.Laws also punish that person for his crimes.