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Sodium, saturated fat and added sugar - Writing task 1 - Cambridge 14


Tranthtrang 1 / 1  
Sep 8, 2020   #1

Three charts analysis



The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar used in breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks in the USA. All of that nutrients may be harmful if eaten too much.

Overall, the rate of sodium and saturated fat are the highest for dinner while sodium for snacks and breakfast is the lowest proportion at all. In addition, added sugar is the highest percentage for snacks.

It is clear that sodium and saturated fat are added in dinner by 43 percent and 37 percent relatively which are the highest percentage at all. Meanwhile, all of 3 nutrients eaten in breakfast are quite low around 14-16 percent.

In snacks, added sugar accounts for 42 percent which is more than saturated fat 2 times (21 percent) and sodium 3 times (14 percent). Besides, sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in lunch are from 19 percent to 19 percent.




Holt [Contributor] - / 9,317 2867  
Sep 8, 2020   #2
When you mention that there are 3 pie charts, you need to make a reference as to what each pie chart represents. You can either identify it by chart title or, you can list the chart titles by saying "the pie charts represent... respectively". It helps clarify your summary presentation in the summary overview.

You need to show more comparisons in your sentence. Instead of just using 2 sentences, aim to write at least 3 sentences so that you can clearly refer to an analytical portion in your paragraph presentation. The analysis is very important because it adds to the clarity of the presentation, allows you to show a mix of simple and complex sentences, and also gives you the opportunity to show your analytical thinking to the examiner.
Holan 3 / 6  
Sep 11, 2020   #3
There are 3 different pie charts provided, so when you mentioned them, you should make it clear what each pie chart represents. Also, instead of using only 2 sentences in the 2 latter paragraphs, you should aim to write at least 3 sentences, you can try to make more comparisons where relevant. I hope that you find my comment useful.


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