IELTS- Task 2: odinary work of art is now easily be labelled as masterpieces.

Please give me some advice on my essay. Thanks so much!

Topic: To be labelled a 'Work of Art', a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled 'masterpieces ' whilst true works of art pass unnoticed.

Do you agree or disagree?

There has been a deterioration in humanity's awareness of masterpieces since the past century. This has led to numerous detrimental problems that eradicate true talented artists. In my opinion, the statement above is appropriate to the world nowadays.

To begin with, there are some reasons explaining why such ordinary pieces of art can win various precious awards. One of them is that valuable prizes are likely to pay more attention to the general attitude of the society toward an artwork, not of expert people. Therefore, unnumbered pieces of art are easily labeled as masterpieces because of the community's high appreciation, despite not being extraordinary. Meanwhile, many works of art that deserve winning prize is constantly ignored due to their eccentric intrinsic, which is hard to understand if not being a professional. Take Picasso's drawings for instance, his talent was eradicated because no one could welcome the uncanny quality inside his arts. Unfortunately, only after his death was his talent noticed and rewarded. This problem has a tendency to occur again if we keep labelling undeserved artworks as masterpieces.

To the best of my knowledge, it is not a good idea to let this state continue. Not only will it upsets true talented artists, but it also leads to a reduction in average work of art awareness. I believe that in order to win a precious award, an art work must be considered carefully by experts, who have high knowledge in art aspect. By conducting this, special qualities in these pieces of art would be examined with meticulousity, which then deserve the substantial effort of artists and consequently receive their high respect.

Having analyzed everything above, I strongly recommend that meticulous examination must be given to artwork when it comes to being labeled as masterpieces. Proper artwork will only be awarded as long as its unique intrinsic is discovered.

I think you really have a problem with your English comprehension skills. You are constantly changing the topics for discussion in every essay that you write. You are incapable of writing the essay based on the original prompt because you keep sensationalizing or misleading your readers. I asked you to download the thesaurus to help you learn how to use alternative words for the original keywords in the presentation. You have not done that here. I think I will have to start teaching you how to write these restatements from the very start. It appears to me that you are self studying right? So I will have to take you by the hand and teach you by section. Let's start with how to properly restate the original prompt.

Use an outline for this part. Divide that into sections as follows:

Topic: a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique.
Problem: it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled 'masterpieces ' whilst true works of art pass unnoticed.
Reason: over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork
Discussion: Do you agree or disagree?

Based on that outline, you should clearly see that there is no detrimental problem being discussed. Only a lack of proper high quality / award worthy craft presentations. It is your tendency to exaggerate the original presentations that pose a problem for your restatements. You are always exaggerating for no reason. Or, in this case, exaggerating to the extent of changing the discussion target. I have tried my best to point out this problem to you several times already but you show no improvement in this section. Perhaps more English vocabulary lessons would help you. Have you tried participating in Conversational English lessons? Those normally help with the development of a student's English writing skill as you learn how to stop exaggerating and simply begin to discuss in verbal form, which often carries onto the written aspect of English writing.

@Holt
Thank you so much for your detailed advice. It is true that I am self-studying. I used oxford thesaurus dictionary for this essay but it appears that I used it wrongly. I guess I persecuted too many advanced words that are unsuitable to the topic without considering its meaning. I will follow your advice, start learning vocabulary and use them properly as well as participating in Conversational English lessons. I wish there will be improvement in my next essay.

Hop that you don't mind pointing out problem in the next essay, although I guess it is annoying to keep fixing my consistent weakness.