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IELTS: Solving the issues of growing traffic and pollution - Increase petrol price?


mariasultana 7 / 13  
Mar 7, 2014   #1
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree and disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?


Government are taking intensive steps to reduce the intensity of pollution in the environment. Price of petrol is the controversial issue, nowadays. Petrol's price is at peak in the world market, and the purpose is to decrease the air pollution and traffic. It is the one solution to control this extreme problem, but this is not an everlasting solution. I disagree to this statement; governments should manipulate this problem by taking other effective measurements.

First and foremost, establish the strong network of public transport in the country. Nowadays, people argue that they cannot complete their work specific time due to lack of public transport. It is the responsibility of government, however, to move anywhere in the town, transport must be available at any time within twenty four hours. As well as, public transport fares should be reasonable, so that everyone take advantage of this facility. For example, Mexico City has strong public transport network, and pollution is under control within this city.

Secondly, create awareness among people about pollution and its' dangerous effects. Government should educate people through media and advertisements. Media is becoming popular, nowadays, it must play vital role in the society to realize how to control pollution.

Lastly, governments take other certain steps, high sale price of cars, reduce the production of private transport and import must be declined, to control these problems. As well as, by reducing import of cars economy of country will be established. Similarly, due to high prices of cars, people will use public transport, and this is another factor to grow economy.

To sum up, governments must take these above mentioned measurements against those severe problems. Although, price of petrol is not enough solution.

KenNgo 2 / 3  
Mar 7, 2014   #2
* I think you should avoid to repeat a word or phrase of word many time: As well as; reduce; solution; problem,...Instead you can use synonyms, for example "problem-->issue".

* everyone can take advantage of from this these facilities
jon_snow 8 / 28 5  
Mar 7, 2014   #3
First and foremost, establish the strong network of public transport in the country

this is not a proper sentence, it became a fragment. it will be better if you write this way; "first and foremost solution is, establish a strong network of public transport in the country."

It is the responsibility of government, however, to move anywhere in the town, transport must be available at any time within twenty four hours.

This sentence is not clear. May be you tried to say, "government is responsible to make a twenty four hours transportation system so that people can access the public transport when ever they want." if so, then why did you use 'however' in the middle of the sentence. 'However' indicates a contradiction between 2 ideas or instead of 'but' we can use 'however'.

Government should educate people through media and advertisements. Media is becoming popular, nowadays, it must play vital role in the society to realize how to control pollution.

you should write how media can play a role

your essay does not contain any specific example to support your solutions. i think it will be better for you, if you focus on one solution and provide a specific example for that solution. Don't try to put the whole picture in your essay, it's not possible to write about all solutions with specific examples in just 30 minutes. it will be better if you give one solution with specific example in one para, then another reason with another example in the next para. My point is one para with one solution and a supporting example. So if it is a 3 para essay then there will be 3 solutions with 3 supporting examples. This will make your writing comfortable, coherent and easy to follow.

don't use number such as firstly secondly to mention your solutions. it's so cliche. Better if you use 'main solution' for 1st solution, then, 'another solution' for the second and last one or lastly for the 3rd or last solution (which you did in your last body para). hope i have made myself clear.

wish you all the best
dumi 1 / 7,201 1592  
Mar 10, 2014   #4
Government are taking intensive steps to reduce the intensity of pollution in the environment

... wrong grammar - government is taking / government takes.... also it is not only about pollution, but growing traffic too.

Price of petrol is the controversial issue, nowadays

.... as per your prompt, the issue is not with petrol prices, but with pollution and growing traffic.
You need to read your prompt carefully and align your writing more with it.

governments should manipulateaddress this problem by taking other effective measurements.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,269 457  
Mar 26, 2014   #5
First and foremost,

Secondly

Lastly

When you write firstly, secondly, lastly to mention supporting points , I am afraid that you are overusing the linking devices. I think the better way is to avoid using lots of the connective words. If you think that you need to earn coherence and cohesion, pay particular attention to demonstrate cohesion.

To sum up

This item is highly common.
Use these less common lexical items:
The aforementioned evidence examines that ...
Given this evidence, it can be seen that ...

Hope this helps :D
oneclbb 2 / 8  
Apr 10, 2014   #6
Hi, i am preparing IELTS as well, my teacher said that answer the question is very important for IELTS writing. I think you just provide some solutions what the government should do instead of increasing petrol price, but you did not clearly answer the question.

I think you need to write proper examples to support your opinion and write the disadvantages increased just petrol price to reduce pollution and traffic.


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