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Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 and predictions for 2025


Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
The chart presented Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 and predictions for 2025. Overall, the meat products had the lowest percentage of incomes and decrease gradually between 2005 and 2015 while dairy product had the highest percentage of incomes and increase gradually between 2005 and 2015.

There are 2 categories of product: Meat Products, and Dairy Products and 1 kind of service: International tourism. It is important to noticed that meat product had the highest income in 2005 with 4 billion USD but decrease 0,5 billion in 2015 and will be predicted decreased 0,5 billion in 2025. Meanwhile dairy products had 5 billion USD in 2005 and reach a high of 8 billion USD in 2015 and will be predicted decreased 0,5 billion USD in 2025. And the other hand, from service incomes, the international tourism had 6,5 billion USD in 2005 and increased steadily at 7 billion USD in 2005 and will be predicted still increase steadily at 8 billion USD.



wew018 - / 20 9  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hi @Yonathan

Your essay is good. The information are well presented. Just consider some issues I have noticed in your work.

to noticed > to notice (infinitive form, to+base form of the verb)

and will be predicted decreased 0,5 billion > and is predicted to decrease by 0.5 billion

And the other hand > On the other hand,

Also, whenever you write a number figure in decimal form, it should be written as "number + decimal point (.) + number" which means, 0.5, 1.4, or 2.11 and not with a comma.

But, other than that, it is good composition. There is a sequence or order when you presented data. You separate sentences well whenever you are done expressing your statements. Keep doing that. Good luck !


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