Hi guys, this is my introduction to the essay on sovereignty I need to submit for the beginning of Jen. Being the first time I write and essay, I wanted your opinion on its length and some suggestions on how to improve it.
Why is the sovereignty/anarchy problematique so important for International relation theorists?
This essay attempts to explain the extent to which both theories and practice deal with the sovereignty/anarchy issue. In order to analyse in-depth the relationship between relative equality of states, and the ungoverned international arena, it is necessary to scrutinize the history and the development of these concepts through the lenses of realism. Once highlighted in turn, independence and interdependence of states in the globalisation era, the attention is gradually shifted towards the neo-neo debate and the English school tradition of global politics. It will be used a balanced approach that has undoubtedly the advantage of understanding international politics' mainstreams as well as explaining the role of state and non-state actors in foreign policy's outcomes. Although some theories might look more persuasive than others, their comparison provides a number of practical arguments to agree or disagree with. The aim here is not to choose the best theory, but rather to understand whether or not sovereign states are the only relevant actors in world politics and what makes the international realm more or less anarchic.
When you write about what you are going to write about, you're essentially putting off your essay. You're not discussing a future project that's unclear, in which case it might be alright to idle. The essay is now; so don't give delay and don't expect that your audience will accept delay.
I really appreciate your help :). I basically changed it using present tenses. Do you think an introduction of 170words is fine for a 3500words' essay? My doubt is whether or not shall the introduction be further developed. I was afraid to cover in-depth what I'm going to elaborate in the body of the essay. Sorry for asking silly questions but I started to study English two years ago and I'm not confident at all.
here is the "new introduction", correct me if I misunderstood your suggestion.
This essay attempts to explain up to which the extent to which both theories and practice deal with the sovereignty/anarchy issue. In order to analyse in-depth the relationship between relative equality of states and the ungoverned international arena, it is necessary to scrutinize the history and the evolution of these concepts through the lenses of main realist's thinkers.----what are the "main realist's thinkers"?
Why do you refer to a "relationship" between the relative equality of states to the ungoverned international arena? Check to make sure you are expressing what you intend to express. I am a little confused.
...to understand whether or not sovereign states are the only relevant actors in world politics and what makes the international realm more or less anarchic. This sounds like it will be a fascinating paper! Simplify as much as possible, because it will become important later to be simple and purposeful in your research.
Thank you very much for the answer. "Relative equality of states and the ungoverned international arena" is a practical way to express both sovereignty and anarchy that are studied mainly by realism, that's why I referred to main realist's thinkers. I will try to simplify as much as I can.
Thanks again for the answers
